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Fallen Upon Feet

Unknown fate shed wings

from the dove fallen



home seems far away



now exiled into desolation

heels bury in sand









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Prompt: " LETTING GO "

http://zindy.deviantart.com/art/Rest-my-love-107912238




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  • ChimericAntithesis
    December 30, 2008
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    Enjoyable take on the prompt.
    Well written.


  • Kari gold member
    December 30, 2008

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    You really managed to bring her soul to life with this piece. Awesome job! Thanks for your entry and the best of luck


  • Angelflower
    December 30, 2008

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    such a tender write.. Your talent is deep in softness, nothing brutal can come from you without seeming soft.. and even if you have words that would break a heart, surely it would smile from the tenderness of it..

    A beautiful write, best of luck in the contest dear.

    Angel


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 30, 2008

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    Excellent work with this prompt!
    I love your presentation here.
    Well done and good luck to you!




    Jeremy0826


  • KayJay
    December 30, 2008
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    Very nicely done... you've captured the struggle nicely.
    Ken


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    December 30, 2008

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    you did an excellent job with the prompt. I really like the last 3 lines.

    good luck
    kat

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