Her eyes held slivers of hope,
& she remained strong
as steel kisses
released my chewed-up tongue
from between bladed lips.
Author notes
Prompt: "Letting go".
Inspired by the novel, as is everything else these days.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie Party by Kari.
400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwinked
I wonder whichnovel is from? It is intriguing. Perhaps I will read the longer version. You been hoodwinked by a Poetic Bandit. Congrats on your silver trophy. -
Hood Wink!
Congrats on the Silver this won ~
I'm beginning to see you like the word tongue but you use it so well it is like a new word every time I see it
Another stunning write, it is short but contains so much the reader is left wanting more but satisfied at the same time
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Wow lor-lor this is really good, I love the descriptions in this, they are superb, you did amazing darling
love you
Brie xxx -
Wow! I must say this was very descriptive. Thank you for sharing. Congratulations on the shiny trophy! ~~Iridessa~~
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Congratulations sissy on the Silver Shiny
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extreme... but effective lol
well done
congratulations on the silver (:
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This goes over just a lil bit but not much it's ok
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Amazing write for the prompt. You are very talented and I wish you good luck in the contest. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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What magnificent imagery!
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You took this prompt to a place that I wasn't expecting and did a great job with it!
Thanks and good luck!
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Very deep and sad!
I love the last two lines in this.
What great imagery you've brought
to this prompt my friend. Lovely
work as always and good luck!
Jeremy0826
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Darkly done... powerful imagery has me wincing but beautiful words heal the phantom pain.
Ken
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oooh sissy I love this poem so much.. I love absolutely love the last 2 lines.
good luck
kat
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