A shadow glides across the moon;
The whisper of a coming doom.
Now silhouetted 'gainst the light,
Now swallowed up in darkest night.
Silently on wings of blue,
Death itself is stalking you.
Midnight scales enthrall, and yet,
Beauty masks the mortal threat.
Ye late night traveler, hurry home,
Lest morning dawn with mournful moan.
Glance not skyward, hist, beware!
There's more than stars that lurk up there.
Author notes
Picture made by FrodoFan, not I.
I think this is my best rhyme poem so far; ironically, it also deals with dragons, as does my worst poem.
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Very good write
I love dragons and this was good, but I felt it could have contained more.
Thanks for entering and keep up the good work. -
"Silently on wings of blue,
Death itself is stalking you.
Midnight scales enthrall, and yet,
Beauty masks the mortal threat.”
These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
-heva♫
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Great picture. It really helps the reader see the dragon you speak about. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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A nice fantasy write! I really LOVE the rhyming in it, which is strange because I'm not a rhymer and usually not fond on rhyming pieces! But this was really great. It reads like an old story too, what with the language you used. Great imagery all over, especially in the first stanza. But I think the third stanza is my favourite, if I had to choose a favourite. It's very foreboding-feeling.
Thanks for sharing this piece with us readers! Perhaps if you write like this, you should consider entering my current quote prompt contest. ;D I'm hardly getting many entries and there is a fantasy-eqsue option!
~Sparrow ♥
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T - Totally awesome! I, myself am mostly a rhyming poet, and am quite in awe of your work!
I notice you've been schooled for creative writing. I believe that it has paid off tremendously!
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Excellent!
I love what you have done here. Your vocab, rhythm, form and rhyme all work well together to make this a great read. The mysterious nature of the poem is enchanting. Congrats on the gold...alby
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Provocative
and exciting piece that evokes
mystery and fright. The images
were brilliant as the moonlight.
This was very well written.
Nice work here
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imagery...is the main need of this poem. The first stanza, although it rhymes well, possesses lines that were used before. I'd like to challenge you to say the same lines differently, and to add imagery into those lines, if syllable count permit.
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Perfect
Your cadence and your stance was great in this write! Regardless of what was in your mind when you penned it it resonates with me. I hope you do well in this contest. I am not a big fan of backgrounds that we use here at AP because the ability to enhance your words or mine is a given with the right background. However, you even were exceptional in that. RC
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Silently on wings of blue,
Death itself is stalking you.
that was probably my favourite rhyme.
it was so simple, yet so poignant and beautiful.
also very pretty imagery.
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I really like most of it. Really, Really like most of it. The only suggestion I can make is maybe "Beauty masks [this] mortal threat." instead of "Beauty masks the mortal threat." Really, Really great poem. I love the flow and the word choice.
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Nicely done, great rhyme, lovely classic style. The ending stanza has a great hurried rhythm for that traveler, yet the feeling of doom, it will not be fast enough I think! Well done.
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Great rhythm in this!!! A really nice compact poem. I really like the way you finish it. What a magical way to look at the sky. It's true, we can never know everything that is up there soaring about...
Thanks for entering. I really enjoyed this.
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Very good
I like the flow and the rhyme. I enjoyed reading this. Will you please read my page? I am new. Thanks.
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