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Frame Of Brass

You are nothing,
a mere reflection of me.
You are someone,
I never want to be.

I do not idolise you,
with your weak bleeding heart,
with ribbons of flesh fluttering,
as you tear yourself apart.

The rare times I see you,
I pity your frozen form,
and the way you still believe,
that one day you'll be warm.

You naively stare back,
your gaze often persists,
you think your safe,
with bleeding mangled wrists.

All the love you've given,
the love you've forced to make,
all the pain you've taken,
for someone elses sake.

You take it all for them,
so they claim "she understands",
is it surprising your wrists break,
when you hold this in your hands?

And this is why I hate you,
and cage you in a frame of brass,
this is why I never let you out,
from your prison made of glass.

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For my mom.

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  • Symphony
    February 12

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    very cleverly written; congrats on the trophies that this poem has won for you;

    the part that reached out to me the most was, "and the way you still believe,
    that one day you'll be warm. " because that's what we/they all believe, in that position isn't it [i assume the ribbons of flesh part was connected to self-mutilation!] - that through this self-inflicted pain, one day they'll love and live again; without understanding that the only way to get through it, is to get over it [in my opinion at least]

    Powerful poem, and well written - thanks for entering


  • oceanbluize
    January 24

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    The ending was nicely crafted. Your rhyme and the story was captivating. This entry will be read very carefully. I assure you. Now lose your mind troubles, no weight left to bear. Ok, now I am speechles.


  • Stormy Days
    January 14

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    Holy crap its so captivating so full of emotion so beautifully written with a brilliant twist and a wonderful rhyme
    ~GOOD LUCK~
    *Dark Poet*


  • broken-angel
    January 11
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    great write xxx


  • ASmileForYou
    January 7

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    Holy wow. I love this. It is so perfect and captures the emotions beautifully. Captivating. Stunning.


  • Lanasaur
    December 31, 2008

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    wonderful

    im amazed thats a brilliance poem it rythmes it says a kinda ballad thing and you have useds so many descriptive words well done keep on penning the good poems.

  • Lea-
    December 31, 2008
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    Wow...that's sad. But real. Good luck.

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