Darkness so thick you could cut it with a knife
Words so cruel I wanted to end my life
Thoughts so deadly whirling through my mind
I couldn't find happieness of any kind
Blind I was, to the people who care
I always thought that no one was there
But squinting through my tears I saw a light
And I blinked once, seeing through the night
I looked harder and that faint little glow
I saw in amazment, started to grow
I slowly laid down the silvery blade
And wondered if maybe I would be okay
I finally saw what I before couldn't see
And I finally saw nothing was wrong with me
A faint smile crept across my tear stained face
And for the first time in a while I knew my true place
Through the darkness I saw the light shine
And knew that happienss could again be mine
Author notes
Option 6. i was going for option 2. but then i got bored. parrot name=horse
A contest entry
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I really liked this because it saw someone in the dark triumphing in the end - as i read it, my heart sank [having just read about 20 suicide type poems] however i really like the way that you lifted this one up -
you don't often see poems starting out in darkness, but ending hopeful, so thanks for being unusual
One small correction is that 'happiness' in the last line is misspelled
Thanks for entering!
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A little tough to read with the font, but alas as I highlighted it, it became clear, great work here
and I thank you for joining in,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
Tragedy turned into a happy ending! I like that! Nice rhyme and flow not to mention the story and the journey that goes along with it. Thanks for sharing this and best wishes,
Frogz~ -
Nice poem. Pretty tough stuff when you think you're alone in this world.
Good luck in the judging, thanks for entering. -
This is really good. Only two entried, and you guys have already managed to blow my mind. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but none too extreme. Happiness was misspelled, and so was amazement, but don't worry, it happens to the best of us.
I like that you gave it a happy ending. So often, people write these dark poems, and don't resolve them, just continue in their misery. You decided everything was going to be al right. Great job!
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