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Mortal Sin.

I want you to know what you did to me.
I want you to come home and see me in all my pain.
Come on now dad, don't look away.
Look me in they eyes or else all this has been in vain.

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Don't you want to know what I made for you?
I drew you a picture using nothing but this knife.
Tell me that you love me and that you've always cared.
I won't make the finishing cut; you can save my life.

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I want you to know how my heart aches because of your actions.
To tell you that I hate you, covers my feelings by a fraction.

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I want nothing more than for you to look my way.
I want to see the look on your face as my life fades away.

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Hey now dad, what's with the eternal frown?
You’ve never before had problems with kicking me when I was down.

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I want you to know that the blame is entirely yours

Think about that, as my blood spills all over your floors.

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I want you to know that you don't deserve to sleep well tonight.
Not while I lay awake crying until the darkness is shattered by light.


I'm sitting here, contemplating my own death.
Can you finally understand why I want to take my last breath?

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I want you to know, that although it's my hand the knife is in,
you're the one who killed me. This is your mortal sin.

Author notes

Ehh. Option D3. Dad Of Course. umm. It's not my dad >_> it's my best friends dad. I wrote this for her because i felt her pain. we're like conjoined twins . Hope Ya Like.

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  • Luciferschild
    January 21

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    i liked it but i thought the rhyme worked against the poem, without it you would have had more freedom and more of an outlet to the emotions


  • serenity silvermoon
    January 5
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    wow this is sad tell your friend i feel for her to i used to cut myself as well and sometimes still do my dad didnt love me back then but he loves me alot more now that i have grown thank you for sharing this poem and i hope your friend gets to read i you to both no i am always here if you need a friend to talk to


  • Dovina
    January 2
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    I feel sorry for your friend, having to deal with this anguish.

    thanks for your entry


  • Manda-Lou
    December 31, 2008
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    Very well written. I'm sorry for the pain of this that your friend had to deal with. Good luck.