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Road To AnyWhere

Mercy cries
      but none the answer
              from peaked crests of tears.

Creation  once
      rocked on secure
            denies not nature's scorn.

           
Beaten paths
        don't always promise
            the road to anywhere.


(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
    12/30/2008

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    February 18

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    Hood-Wink!

    Wowzers ~

    Quite a profound and raw poem that reaches through and makes me think and wonder - Awesome

    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      February 18
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      Manda

      Thank you so much for taking the time to read so much of my work. d

  • ImirNik
    January 21

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    pessimistic and young with good arrangement. lots of good Ideas under expressed.
    (maybe a comma on creation once/rocked on, secure/ denies not nature's scorn.)


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      February 18
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      ImirNik

      Thanks for the read and advise. I appreciate it always. Blessings.d


  • Lady Michaella
    January 21

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    wow...this is stunning!!
    the words were really deep and even with such short words. i loved this.
    x
    and excellent write


  • Ninth-Poet
    January 20

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    Bravo!!

    I liked your piece deeply as your words create a masterful piece of imagery thast profoundly influence the mindset of the reader.As well the so few words in your poem adds tonne more drama and appeal.

    -Keep the ink flowing!
    Ninth-Poet


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      January 20
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      Ninth-Poet

      I appreciate your thoughtful comments. It pleases me to know you enjoyed this piece. Blessings. debby


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 10

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    This has some profound lines in it, with great images to support them, well done. Best to you in the contest


  • SongOfSilence
    January 6

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    Whoa!

    "Mercy cries
    but none the answer
    from peaked crests of tears."

    Beautifully written =]

  • celadia
    January 6

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    it's a bit depressing, I think, but that's OK, poetry can be what you want and you can do anything you want with it, I guess it's just saying that human life has lost it's meaning for a lot of people.

  • A-muse-in-writer
    December 31, 2008
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    Loved it

    Very deep and meaningful


  • BonnieQ silver member
    December 31, 2008

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    30 Words of Brilliance!

    I do believe, Sis, that you have totally met the contest requirements. This speaks volumes and ends with an irrefutable truth. Awesome, as always with your writing! So, gold it is!

    Much love & hugs, SisBon

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