The wind blows through the door
I feel the chill rush over me
It reminds me of the night...
The night that she left me for good
How could I forget that night
There was a blizzard that kept anyone from going anywhere
But she said she needed to come and see me
I begged her not to go out
She did anyways ...
The wind was howling as it moved through the house
It rattled the windows
And shook the doors
The cold sank into your soul
I finally saw the car's headlights in the window
Thank you God for letting her get here safely
I opened the door waiting for her to get out of the car
She didn't
I quickly threw on my coat and boots
And ran out to the idle car
When I got there I couldn't see into the windows
They were so covered with snow and ice
I tried to open the door
It was frozen shut
I started pounding vigorously to loosen the ice
Finally the door swung open
Her body toppled out and unto the ground
The heater had stopped working
And it was a good sixty below
I picked her up and rushed her inside
I took off her clothing and wrapped her in a blanket
I ran over to the thermostat
And cranked it up as high as it could go
I went back to her and took off my clothing as well
I sat next to her
Both of us wrapped up in the blankets
I held her closely
I wouldn't let go, she had to warm up
This couldn't be the end
I listened for a breath
I felt for a heartbeat
I couldn't detect either
Her body felt warm now, but it was too late
I asked God "why?"
She only wanted to be with me tonight
A few years have passed since that night
And every year on the same night the window blows
And I see the car out there
Every year I'm forced to relive it
She haunts my thoughts and dreams
But somehow it makes me feel at peace
Because every year I get to see her one more time
I regret that I wasn't able to tell her how much I loved her
The last thing I said to her was "No, don't come!"
Maybe this year it will be different
Maybe this year I'll be able to tell her how I feel
Maybe this year I'll be able to save her
The wind is reaching deeper into my soul
I feel myself become cold and numb
I've decided this that time I will join my love
And our souls will forever be together
I hear her calling to me
I can feel her presence
The door flies open as the wind pushes against it
It is now time
As I walk to the door
I pass by the photos of us on our honeymoon
I stop briefly to look at the picture of us on our wedding day
I continue walking
And pass by the kid's toys they forgot to clean up this morning
I look ahead and see the mirror
I see myself
I see where the tears have frozen to my face
The condensation has formed icicles on my nose
I pass by my jacket and boots and am out the door
Now, we are together again
Just as it was meant to be
She looks at me with a saddened face
I ask her
"Why do you look so sad?
We are united once again"
My love responds
"You will leave our children without a Father
Who will look after them?"
I wanted to stay with her so badly
We could be together and happy
Forever joined in the afterlife
But I knew that she was right
So, I turned back on the journey I started
And was so determined to finish
I was this close to being where I longed to be the most
In her arms
But It's true
I couldn't leave our children behind right now
I know that sometime in the future we will be reunited
But until then...
I walk back in the door and slowly close it as her image fades
I go into the kitchen
Wrap my self in some blankets and make some hot tea
I sit here now in front of the fireplace
Remembering this evening
I knew it would be the last time I would see her
I now know my reason to live
Thank you my love, for stopping me from making a horrible mistake
Author notes
1, emiley is amazing
Written February 11th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- seven topics.. I NEED GOOD POETRY!!! by tastetheapathy.
337 points, ended April 4, 2005, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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loved it
i came across this poem and i just wanted to comment on it i really loved it it is so very sad but also a very beautiful write i don't know if it is true but i myself have lost someone i lost my 6 year old little boy so i can understand the pain in the poem and wanting to be with the loved one i just wanted to tell you you did a wonderful job and i hope to read more of your poems
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Laura
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Well geeze, I feel kinda embarrased now... In a good way, thank you for your kind words. I am glad to know that someone likes this, I for one can't stand it, I'm thinking of doing a complete rewrite... but of courese leave this one as is... Lol, anyhow, thank you so much for the kind words, they mean a lot to me.
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the last time i read this poem was on march 15, 2004 and i was absolutely stunned by your work. the imagery and emotion put into this write was wonderful to have the opportunity to read. and i came across it today and read it once more and i still find it tear jerking and beautiful in every way. i am greatful i found it again ... i just wanted to let you know that.
Babie
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I gotta applaud this again if you dont mind, its still one of favorite poems Ive read in awhile!
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I kinda was thinking that, but thank you very much for explaining that
Thats very deep, you did such a great job!! I love that it made me stop and think about what I was reading. I actually read in twice to get a better understanding. For some reason it was stuck in my head all that night and was just thinking on it. TRULY GREAT JOB!!
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Thank you!!!
Finally!!! someone picked up mostly on what I was talking about. Yes she pulled up at those last few moments with just barely enough strength to stop the car and then was in that place in between, like a limbo where if she had a choice and saw that it would be better if she went for a family as a whole, and that's where the husband comes in, he both sees the light from the car and the light of her soul pulling up for one last moment and just before it got to him it stopped because it was so weak it couldn't move anymore, and now that his wife new another soul loved her so much he was willing to go out in the cold to get her back to life and that's ll that she needed to teach him to raise a good family, so as soon as he touched her skin to skin she felt that warmth comig for her from someone else and was willing to finally let go... Ummm, that may have taken a little while but I hope you understand that part to be like her last stand to say "I love you" to her beloved. Well, I must digress you may be lost but I hope that maybe you can understand the poem in it's entirety. -
:: sniffles:: that was so sad!!!!! I could so seriously cry at the moment! That was so greatly written!! :: tears ::
The last thing I said to her was "No, don't come!"
Maybe this year it will be different
Maybe this year I'll be able to tell her how I feel
Maybe this year I'll be able to save her
Really got me bacause this person, and I really hope its not you, still feels like this isnt really a reality and maybe things will change.
The cold sank into your soul
I finally saw the car's headlights in the window
Thank you God for letting her get here safely
I opened the door waiting for her to get out of the car
She didn't
I quickly threw on my coat and boots
And ran out to the idle car
When I got there I couldn't see into the windows
They were so covered with snow and ice
I tried to open the door
It was frozen shut
was the only part that I didnt really get. How could he see the headlights finally appear though she is dead with the doors frozen shut? Did she barely pass away right as she arrived from the cold? -
very nicely done, it made me and jess almost want to cry. you have very descriptive words in here bringing the emotions to life. nicely done again and good luck in the contest.
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Very Mooving
You have said in this poem the point that I like to try to ge across. Tell some one you love that you love them before it is too late. You also turned around in the end of your poem and made another point that I have been trying to get across. Killing yourself to be with some one else in heaven will not get you there. Well actualy in your poem you said it did get you to see her again but you went home, that's ok. But in my opinion, killing yousrelf will only get you to Hell and never see your love again. This was a very very good write though. Great job on it. -
Wow, what an emotional piece. You have me crying! I know a guy who lost his wife in a car crash and was left to raise their new born son (only 2 months old) by himself. I can gurantee that he had the same feelings of suicide. Beautiful write.
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This is a very sad, and touching piece. It really got me in the heart, and sank into my mind. I felt the same way when my Grandpa Larry died about 9 years ago. I felt like killing myself to be with him in heaven; this led to my depression. I'm much happier nowadays, and I think everyone should know that there's a reason we are here, and that there's always someone that cares. This is a wonderful piece that teaches us all that we can survive through even the toughest times, and that love has a powerful impact on us. Very well done. Good luck in the contest. ^_^
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Awwww...
this is so sad!!! Very well done. You really delivered a heart wrenching piece about love and pain. Nicely done. Thanks for entering. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest! 
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Huh? Your sentence makes little sense, could you please clarify as to what you are trying to say?
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that was rather sad and if you mean the story u r sadly mistaken.
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The first section had such foreshadowing, I knew that something bad was coming. This is magnificent emotional writing, it carried me along. Walking out the door, he passed so many reasons not to go, that I was relieved that the ghost said so. Wonderful work.
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AMAZING!!
A wonderful piece of poetry that you have here. You did a wonderful job of giving the feeling of being there witnessing this as it unfolded. I too amd glad that he went back to raise the children. A truly great piece of poetry here and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Mary Anne -
My words are lost again...can't find anything to comment
My god...this is a wonderfully written poem...I loved all the emotions in it... It seemed a bit long to me in the beginning, but I'm very glad I started to read it...
Thanks for charing, and good luck in the contest!
Leander -
I love the emotion!!! Perfect
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flabbergasting
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Fantastic write. Long, but definitely worth the read!
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this was great i loved it how he was so close and stayed cause of the children it was great great write -
awwwwwwwwwww. You told a wonderful moving, vivid story. It was like I was rigfht there in the blistering cold having the flash back myself. Nice work.
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sometimes a vision or a dream or a reality can be like a winter storm...hit with such velocity it demands to be heard this is that kind of piece,,,thank you for sharing...freda
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I am glad the person in the story decided to go back and raise his family. I am sure he wanted to join his soul mate, but the story was so powerful as it was written. I liked the way it was written. I liked that it was double spaced. I don't usually comment on things like that, but I did this time. The background was nice.....but I too, think this belongs in the story department, and not in the poems. Doesn't matter to me, just a suggestion. Great write....I too wonder....is it a true story, or maybe based on a true story? Cheryl
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when we leave a legacy behind whether it be eternal love or the by product of such passion, and one is left to caretake what remains, it is a sacred task, and worthy of respect and praise, the one who remains must replace what remains remains, until all are joined as a family again on the other side where love again will remain forever....nice story, I hope it is not ture, but if it is May God bless you with peace, and wisdom for two now one.~~~~Artis
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excellent poem real real long and in deph which makes it amazing, good use of words filled with emotion, lot of feeling love it!
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"The window blows" is this ment to be "the wind blows"?
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Nicely written and brimming with emotion. There are a few typographical errors that you might like to correct at some point. I hope this wasn't written from personal experience because it was so sad
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Very nice.
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What a very touching story. I like the way you wrote it, short/long contrasting lines. I love the backround too. It makes me feel cold.. Excellent work!
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very nice i loved it. very sad but at least u realized what was right. keep it up. thanx for sharing. EaRiNe!!!!
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OH MY GOD!!! THIS WAS THE BEST STORY IVE EVER READ IN MY ENTIRE LIFE! I GOT CHILLS THE WHOLE TIME I WAS READING THIS..THAT NEVER EVER HAPPEN TO ME BEFORE! THIS WAS..... I DONT KNOW WHAT TO SAY! BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN... NO WORDS ARE AVALIBLE TO ME TO SAY. THANK YOU FOR SHARING THIS!!!! OMG!!! ~EDGE
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Hi therem
I feel that this was an interesting write, it wwas so sad, but so amazing, it was sawesome, it had so much emotion and thought put into it. Well done and thanks for sharing. I hope that you will continue to write and share.
All the best to you and yours
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AWESOME!
WOW, I couldn't get past the first half, it was so sad, GREAT WRITE! AWESOME! keep up the good work! -
Very good
ALthough a story not a poem, very very very inspiring. So sad, and so beautiful. The loss the heartbreak, how do you go on. I know I couldn't loose my girl. But I guess you had more to live for. Your children, they are the last parts of her. Cherrish them forever, for through them you cherrish her. -
:'( wow... that put some tears in my eyes. A very saddened, yet beautiful piece, filled with love. It was a very nice write.. and I enjoyed every tear as I read it. Thank you for sharing this.. God Bless.
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Piece of great poetry, so naturally so deep love so pretty expressed. I'm speachless too. Anna
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OMG ... i am in complete awe from reading this ... all i could do when i finished was cry :'( it was so sad ... the emotion, the words, the love within the words ... all of it ... Awesome write ... i can't say enough about it ... i'll just leave it here ... cherish your talent ... it's superb .... good luck in the contest
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wow...i loved the image of you pulling her out of the car and taking her inside...wrapping her in a blanket with your body next to hers...it seemed like such a loving thing to do...but it was too late and that killed me..wow..great job and good luck in my contest
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wow you have a great imagination, and your writing is great too of course. i like this one very much. thanks for your entry.
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Absolutely beautiful, I'm speechless, This really moved me.....
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wow, this is really good...it almost made me cry...if you really love someone, you'll do anything to be with them, even if that means dying for them...this has to be one of the best i've read in a long time...great write
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oh my gosh... that was absolutely beautiful! I was drawn in right away... I agree- the perfect was to describe the love between spouses. Thank you for sharing!
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Wow... Nice way to explain the love for a spouse... and the way you never wanna be apart... but sometimes you have to stay strong for others that you love... especially your children... Don't forget... "Drink more coffee"...
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My first read of you Steve, and I am very impressed. This is a great tale told brilliantly. Imagery is excellent and the emotions run high in your writing.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us all.
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I am speachless. This story was so heartbreaking, yet to somebody out there, oh so true. To want to die to see their loved one...very very sad. A very close friend of mine died recently, she was 27years old, and her husband has too thought these things recently. It is hard to live without the love of the one we married..united forever, and as the vows go...until death do we part.
Very emotional, and exceptionally written..my heart goes out to you
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~Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy do I cry....Beautiful piece and so can relate~ I believe in the afterlife and have seen the image of my love who has saved me more than a few times~I only wrote about one~
This was amazing~Thank you for sharing this piece my dear~
Best wishes to you in the contest~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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wow..ok so i was all happy untill i read that poem and i cried and i cant stop crying. wow just wow..im speechless keep writing man keep writing
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I am really in awe right now this is so heartbreaking yet so loving and it really moves your heart. I think you did a wonderful job, keep penning and I am glad you think coffee is disgusting because that means I can have your share.
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PERFECTION!!!
Aww sweetie if i felt any closer...wow this was great you know i love your work but this one is one of your best i think it was a tad long..but that would be it's only little tiny flaw...i loved it soo much every emotion you explored made me just wow feel like i understand how your brain works and just how you are when things in your life seem to tip not in your favor...great just great...perfection...it takes a lot to impress me but you did it...just perfect! -
very good...
i really liked this it showed amazing writing skills...2 questions though... why didnt he call 911 and how did she drive to his house frozen? -
Excellent
A haunting in a most loving sense... -
Anyone who has been united in true and dee[ abiding love as
you two were, never really loose each other in heart and
soul, only in body when a tragedy takes one away...your dream
was a natural response...and the reality of other lives yet
to love and cherish through her love and lingering spirit and
strength in you...is the legacy she left you aand your children
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This is a very haunting and hurting tale of lost love. You paint such vivid pictures. I could feel the bitter cold. I could see you trying to save her. I could even hear the wind shaking the windows. Excellent descriptive poetry here. Very intense. Thank you for sharing. I clung to every word.
Ja
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Very beautiful...I too wonder if it was a true story or not.
I really liked the ending which shows hope:
"I now know my real reason to live"
Nicely done!
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awesome
damn man.. such emotion.. obviously nokie is an ethiopian mime, who, aside from not being able to portray emotion, can eat thier poo, cuz this thing was awesome. it told the whole story. i'm so sorry for your loss. be strong, live long, die well. -
What can I say...I have tears in my eyes. What a powerful a message at the end of the story...Atleast you know she is a peace and she wanted you to be at peace..You will be together again..but at the right time...you have an important job to do. I can totally understand why you understood my poem ~Wounded~...it spoke to you. Thankyou so much for sharing this and for your comment on mine
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Sad story, Wrangler...
If it's true, I sympathize with you.
Sometimes it's hard to write these things..
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wow man this is some great stuff. and that nokie person has no clue what they're talking about. keep this great stuff up man, it's awesome.
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Well, Steve, I must agree with everyone here... well, except Noki, who must know nothing at all about poetry. This is too long? I shudder to think Noki might read "The Ice Princess," which is of epic proportions. Noki might be surprised to learn that stories like Cinderella and Sleeping Beauty actually were of novel proportions: not these little 10 page kiddy stories filled mainly with cute little pictures. Nevertheless, this is a fantastic write: I did detect some spelling errors and wrong word usage, which in no way took away from the story itself. It also possesses very vivid imagery with an all-important ending message. ~~BonnieQ
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Wow! This hit a chord with me! This morning, I was on my way back from class, and I fishtailed on a steep and curving entrance road ontot he interstate. Swerved off the side and ended up in a ditch. I don't often get cold, but I was standing outside on the side of the highway for two hours in the biting wind until the tow truck arrived.
The length was perfect, telling of an epic, a heartfelt story, and none of it should be cut out! These are my favorite lines:
I look ahead and see the mirror
I see myself
I see where the tears have frozen to my face
Phenominal emotion - there is a realness to it. If you didn't actually experience this, I can certainly see the talent you have with donning another personna! Great write and I see no mistakes
All my best 
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Like everyone else, I feel I must diss on nokie. I thought this was beautiful length - honestly shouldn't have been any longer or any shorter. You took me to your cabin, I watched you helplessly try to revive her body, I felt the heartache when you realized she was actually gone. This was an amazing write, wow, I'm still sitting here in awe of it honestly. To lose a loved one, I can't imagine the inexplicable pain one must go through. I think the closest I ever got to understanding was this poem. I'm so glad I added you to my favorites - you are an awesome writer! Keep popin' out the good ones
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Great job!!
Omg, this is such a great poem, and i totally disagree with nokie, it seems that u actually have been through this experience because you wrote in such detail, and by making it shorter it would totally loose the depth that a poem such as this needs. Keep it going, your a fantastic writer!!
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so beautiful yet so sad...
Awww...
This poem is so beautiful and yet so sad. You did a wonderful job. It gave me goosebumps. Continue to write such awesome poems. I'll continue to read them.
Much respect,
cRiMsOnRaZoR
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This was beautiful and nokie can suck ass....smile This was very heartfelt. You did an amazing job..
One question...where does it say how long a poem should or should not be?
Loved it,
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I think that this nokie must be feeling dead inside or something... I honestly am I awe with this write.. You captured everything too well, it's scary... I totally disagree with nokie, I think that this is wonderfully and beautifully done in it's own sense... It truly makes me cry reading this... I do suggest you reread this through, there are a few errors you may want to fix such as having it only in first person with no "yous", you know what I mean??? Honestly, love I think this one impacted and hit me the hardest... Thanks for sharing this...Keep on writing... Take care of yourself, always yours ~Star -
hmm way way way too long, you can tell your a good writer but maybe poems arent for you? it seemed very un-emotional to me, like this never actually happened to you. i stick to writing what i know, what i feel or atleast try really hard to imagine wot sum1 else is going through. Sorry to be so critical you really are a good writer! good luck! nokie xx.
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