I did everything I could
I gave everything I should
Til there was nothing left to give
Maybe it was my fault
Maybe I didn't do as much as I thought
But did you really give a shit?
You know that I loved you unconditionally
Now I'm half the person I used to be
I guess it wouldn't matter to you
I cherished every moment we had
Never thought I would feel so sad
I'm wrapped up in solitude
Even though you treated me so wrong
I want you to know I will move on
Because I'm not nothing
You couldn't see what you had by your side
Now the love inside of me has died
Because you treated me like I was nothing
Please tell me what you think
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Great rhyming! Pretty natural. One comment thought (I hope it doesn't defeat the rawness
) THe repetition of nothing in the last stanza was a tad annoying but overall a great write! Keep it up! (sometimes the best poems come late at night 
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thank you very much. Yeah actually there was more to that stanza but I forgot to add it lol. But thank you for the comment. And yes I seem to do my best writing late at night....something will just come to me and i'm off writing lol.
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my pleasure!
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I liked this poem it has real emotion keep it up =]
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Well thank you very much! I wrote it very late last night. I didn't revise it because I wanted as much rawness as possible. Thank you again.
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