he's only seventeen and look at what he's already done,
day by day he drinks away his memories,
by the bottle.
the alcohol isn't helping him forget,
it's killing the real person he is,
killing the person she loves.
she just wants him to stop,
just stop all the nonsense.
can he see what he's doing to her?
He's tearing her heart out,
he's causing more pain to her everyday,
he's slipping away from her,
she just loves him so much,
sorry just shouldn't work anymore on her.
all he had to was call,
and she'd be there,
no matter how much it would kill her,
kill her to see him like that.
she gave him her hand,
she gave him her heart,
she knew what she was getting into,
all the way from the start...
he used her shoulder to cry,
she was his strong hold.
can he see what his doing to her?
oh and don't worry it's only just begin,
he turns to the heroine now.
the alcohol and drugs are killing him,
she knows there not helping him forget...
does he even know what he did to her that day?
he didn't even know who she was,
three needles and six bottles on the desk,
she feared what he had done,
it cracked her heart right down the middle.
he slapped her,
the ring on his finger sliced the skin on her cheek.
look what he has done to himself,
look what he has done to her...
Author notes
okay... so someone gave me an awesome idea to take this poem out of first person. in which i think it worked a little better, everything is pretty muh the same but it's not in frist person. ^.^ it's still the same story: two seventeen year olds, a girl and a guy. they both like eachother blah. the guy has a hard life so he starts drinking and doing drugs blah. one day she goes to see him and he doesn't know it's her, so he abuses her ]: blahh... hope you liked.
im gunna tear your ass up like we just got married.
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Another good poem, Audrey.
Are you sure you're 11? It's hard to believe that an 11-year-old can write so well about a 17-year-old. When I was 11, 17 was, like, waaaay beyond my ability to visualize.
I mean, I was aware that there were kids bigger than me and I tried to stay out of their way, but I had no more idea what was going on in their lives than I did the lives of people in China.
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awesome
i really like it,
its vivid and really creative
thanks for the comment btw
and yea later ill read more of ur stuff
cus this ones really good
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wow
its really understandable great work keep on penning -
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For your age thats pretty powerful stuff. its really made me think. there are women out there every day living like this, and I'd never really thought about it until now.
good on you! i love it.
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