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Love again?

Can we ever love again?
You left so long ago.
I wander, how I wonder
Can we ever love again

I was wrong
So very wrong
I ask, Iask
Can we ever love again?

Years have come and gone
Lfe is deary and long
I love you, I love you
Can we ever love again?

Now old and gray
May I live another day
To see you once again
Can we ever love again?

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  • Di Shirley
    April 24
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    If this is so for you then the answer is a differnent YES . I met a couple in their 80's who recently married. She had a hens night he had a bucks. Our hearts stay young if we allow it, it is only the external that ages.
    Keep young at heart in your poetry and love will come again. Blessings.


  • just mercedes gold member
    April 14

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    Very effective use of repetition, rhyme and rhythm. The question is poignant, and the emotion, of hope and regret, is strong. Lovely work - and for my own sake as well as yours, I trust that the answer is 'Yes'.


  • white stone
    April 8

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    I enjoyed your mature perspective on love. I believe that we are all children, not so different, no matter how old we are or how different we may appear to be.


    Lfe-life
    Trying to be helpful...

  • patrick20traveler
    April 6

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    To admit you were wrong is a good thing. I like this--the simplicity and the repetition give it a strong feeling.


  • myrataal silver member
    March 29

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    Ah.

    The repetition works well with the word AGAIN. But you know, again is a gain. We can ever gain again, don't you think? Oh yes. One CAN love again.

    I know people say SOUL MATE, but that is not all soul, of course: a hand on an arm and a soft hug in a together moment bring to both skin and eyes and soul a shimmer ...

    And: there is some expectation in this poem which I loved: AH! you may find your love again! You may!~ Try.



    Thank you for a melodious write.
    Love
    Myra


  • individuality gold member
    March 15

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    lask? is there a space missing there with a second i ask or is that a word?
    the flow is very good, it rolls off the tongue, the repetion works nicely, very songlike and pleasing.


  • Broken-Rickie
    March 6

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    This is so sad. I love it though and I hope you get your love back.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    March 1

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    This reads like a true lament with its repeated phrases and refrain. For we who have loved someone long ago gone from life or at least from a life shared, this poem plucks those often played strings of our lonely hearts.
    For some the question has been answered in fact and in truth one way or the other. For others it may be simply rhetorical, but for those who feel its reality, it is full of anguished hope.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 19

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    Excellent and verythought provoking. I can honestly say that we can love again. Sometimes it can take a long time, but it can happen.
    Thank you for sharing and best wishes in all you do.
    Gaylene


  • Mirthryl
    February 3

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    Excellent use of meter to bring focus to your repeating line. Lovely alliteration (wander...wonder) in the first stanza. A transcriibed sigh from the heart.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    February 2

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    I don't know the form name but this is a charming repeating line form with a distinctly effective ryme scheme that does not clang along like a cowbell .. schemes such as this in the hands of a lesser poet would sound like a gypsy cart full of pots and pans and an occasional donkey braying behind the cart on too short of a rope .. but here, it is a charming song, and brings to tears to the eyes with its tend sorrow which does not whine but simply shows the ear that it is of a great power equal to that of the eye.

    excellence!


  • Capt Jed silver member
    January 24
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    Great question. I suppose it would be left up to the individual. I like your poem, it gives those of us who are close to the end of our years something to think about. The way I look at it...as long as God puts love in our hearts, we should pass it along to others.
    Thanks for sharing your thoughts, I enjoyed the read.
    Ron


  • Ithica silver member
    January 9

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    I know the feeling... To live in the shadow of a loss often darkens hope and faith alone can be fragile ground!!!


  • Sandygram
    January 8

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    I think we can always love again. Anything is possible. Some loves stay in our hearts forever just longing for that one chance to be with them. This was a lovely poem. Sad but sovery beautiful. A pleasure to read.
    So glad to se you writing again. You take care, Sandy


  • DennisP1
    January 7

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    Sad

    I feel your heart. I feel your loneliness within your words. The question "Can we love again?" hangs forlornly unanswered.

    Short and to the point.
    Thanks for the fine read.
    I liked it.

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