Slipping into that special kind of lull
singing softly a simple lullaby,
I am drifting into dreams: endlessly dull
singing softly a simple lullaby.
Hush now love, don't you fret
Hypnos is here to take you yet,
Over the trees we will surely fly
let me sing you my best lullaby.
Dreams begin to change within us all
singing softly a simple lullaby,
Clouds of pearly comfort will enthrall
singing softly a simple lullaby.
Come with me sweet child love
would you like to dance above?.
Stars are out sparkling so brightly
lullaby's are sung ever so lightly.
There I am now up above this place
singing softly a simple lullaby,
cringing inside when I see God's face
singing softly a simple lullaby.
Love and laughter, what we hear
dancing inside the moonlight so clear,
Swinging with you up so high
listening to my softly spun lullaby.
Death becomes your only escape now
singing softly a simple lullaby,
peacefulness he will no longer allow.
singing softly a simple lullaby.
You are now mine dearest one
why don't we enjoy some fun,
Inside my palace full of terror
innocence is found nothing rarer.
Nightmares are what you see inside
singing softly a simple lullaby,
echoes from your screams will collide
singing softly a simple lullaby.
Hush now love, don't you fret
Hypnos is here to take you yet,
Over the trees we will surely fly
let me sing you my best lullaby.
Midnight Raeven
December 30, 2008
12:08 PM
Author notes
Ok, so when I googled Hypnos it said that he was the God of Sleep.. His twin brother was Thanatos, God of Death...His mother was Nyx..Goddess of Night. His sons were the Dreams and I took it into account where he could easily turn your sweet dreams into nightmares leading you to his Twin on the other side.
I took it that way and made it on the macabre side of things! I hope you enjoy it!
Midnight Raeven
In a list
A contest entry
- Greek Dynasty by Titus.
700 points, ended January 4, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sing me a Lullaby by Rsm.
900 points, ended July 2, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awesome
Congrats on the gold! Wow you sure took me on a roller coaster ride. As I was reading I pictured you singing this to your baby then, was stupefied when you turned it into a nightmare! It is a terrific write. I especially enjoyed your footnotes to explain the sudden change from sweet dreams to nightmares. I love learning new things and you taught me well. It's great that you researched your character!
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Wow, you really took the time to read my works and I appreciate that! This contest was probably one of my all time favorites here on AP. I thought it was interesting and I loved doing this one! I thought it was fun how I made him singing to you then making it into something dark. Hypnos was a very scary God, he kind of reminded me of the Sandman, he helps you sleep, but in the end he wants your soul!
Thanks again!
Midnight Raeven
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Well done.
Its good the way it rhymes from its top to its tale, Well worth the Gold it was given. Nice lines Sir..
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Nice hypnotic tale. Well done.
Mike
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oh this one I like very much
a telling tale, swept away
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amazing poem very well done dear
i always love your work
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Thank you Love! I am glad that you liked my poem!
and 
Your loving wife!
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This is very creative and unique.Like your version of lulluby.Great job you should have won the contest!
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crosses my fingers
He hasn't judged it yet!
Thanks for stopping in to read my poem! Your comment was much appreciated!
Midnight Raeven
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.
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Thank you for stopping in to read my poem, your comment is much appreciated!
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You are quite welcome.
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Oh, deliciously dark, a most ambitious undertaking here and highly creative, and the repeat of the second stanza as the final stanza is a mavrelous touch! bravo!
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I thought it made it seem more of a lullaby to repeat that last part of Hypnos singing to the child.
Glad you enjoyed my poem!
Midnight Raeven
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So deeply
dark and enthralling. It moved rhythmically and it pacified.
I love Grecian myth, and how dangerous it is to mess with Gods...
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That was how I was trying to show it as well.. You never quite get what you ask for from the Gods, they are too funny in their own right. All of the eons that they have been there watching over us and they do tend to get bored sometimes.
I am glad you liked my poem!
Midnight Raeven
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darling, where did you get this darkness? this one creeped me out! holy moly! Great piece, but I(my opinion only) found the lullaby line too repetitive on this piece. especially during the transistion between dream and nightmare. it needs something in there with more punch in order to not be so creepy. if the twist into creepy is intentional.. .then leave this piece alone.
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It was my every intention to make it creepy and I am glad that I with my little bitty poem could creep someone like you out...(Talks about Maggie)
I wanted to make it into the darker side of being the God of sleep and what he could do so easily with his powers of persuasion and being able to make you dream anything he so wished.
I am so happy that you thought this piece was well written. I am aiming to make my poems better and taking more out of myself is making it fun and enlightening.
I love you, Mommy!
Always your,
Summer Angel
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Oh, oh, cool pickachur!!
Now I reads poem
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"singing softly a simple lullaby" -- I love how fluid that line is, and love that it was repeated throughout the poem. The whole poem was given a dreamlike atmosphere, like it was meant to put the reader in a kind of trance. Hypnos sounds like a really interesting God o.o.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Nephy Poo, I am glad that you liked the picture, I didn't want to use the ones of him being all old and icky.. so I went with anime
onto the poem...
I am so happy to see that you said it kinda put you in a trance, this was my idea when writing it. To show you how easily it was to have Hypnos take you on his ride of a lifetime.
Hypnos is God of sleep and me love to sleep so I HAD to do this one!
gles the Nephy Poo!
~StepMommy!~
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