And as my feet touched solid ground
I took a moment to look around
of all the things that I did see
the most important was in-front of me.
Two roads to take one light one not
one felt very cold the other hot
a choice to make lay ahead of me
inside a voice cried out to flee.
I took a while and asked out loud
"is this a test?." to the empty crowd
Two roads in life and neither clear
I listened carefully and what did I hear?
A calming voice from deep inside
my mind and spirit did collide
instead of guessing and stepping wrong
I wondered which would make me strong.
Take the warmth and stay quite calm
or test the cold and be in harm
I smiled a while and made the call
Turned around and walked away tall.
A contest entry
- Pictures And Quotes Prompts by Sandygram.
1800 points, ended January 7, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Quatrain tie the line together tightly with rhyme. The shape is defined and moves the reader through life. Decide what road to travel and chose what direction life will move in. I find this creditable and interesting. Thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck
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A wonderful poem you have written. We all need to look within ourselves for inner strength to make hard choices. Sometimes the right choice is to walk away completely in a new direction. The rhmye and flow is great and made for a pleasurable read. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Take care, Sandy
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Outstanding write, Grandstand imagery along with a flow of ease, pulling out the truth of the inner core with stuggle with... I find this to be a very deep write
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"And as my feet touched solid ground" I always like when a poem starts with "and" it makes me feel like there is more to the story.. .there is something that came before. However, in your first stanza you start two lines with and. My suggestion would be to take out the first and unless you can recreate the third line to stand alone without "and".
I think this is a journey that we all take. It's so hard to live life with what if's. You have to take to life and never turn back.
I'd like to know how that one moment of clarity affected you....
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Spot on as always, I thought that the third line was a bit of a mouthfull..
Thanks September
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Wow, this was really great brother mine, this really blew me away. You did such a wonderful job. There was so much emotion here... Bravo! best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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Aw hun
This one says so much and touches the reality of life
Best wishes to you in the contest
your sis x
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lovely rhythm
Your poem has an excellent flow and strong message within. A great write.
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Wow~
Oh My Word Brother this is one Powerful also Empowering piece penned~
Excellent message also energy that could be felt
Love this also the tight rhyme~
to question- is this a test-
I imagine there are others who question also-
sure can relate
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is really well written.Liked what you had to say.Good luck in the contest.
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Bubs,
You are amazing! I know the inspiration for this came from Robert Frost, The Road Not Taken, and I must say, What a great job you did on this one! Though not my favorite poem of his, You took that prompt and ran, all the way home with it! I love this one!
Best of luck in this contest!!!
Ek is lief vir jou altyd
Nyetta
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Thank you my sister..
Ek is lief vir jou altyd
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This is beautiful and so in depth, your words are something that we all could learn from ..
best of luck to you my friend.
Joann
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