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Memory fails.

Missing image

It seemed simple.

                     Yes at first.


 

Heavy raindrops fell,

blurred your face. Even

in my memory you are lost

in those trees, sunlight dancing with you

across seemingly still waters.

 

A thousand times i've sat,

tried to remember that smile

Clutching onto this picture.

                               Whose memory, is as bad as mine.


What beauty once contained

in this image, slipped away

leaving me forever trying to remember

that love in your face.


 

Author notes

John Jarvis- Artist of the prompt. picture is the prompt.

not sure where this even started =/ or even if i might alter it in a little bit, ill let you know if i do.

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  • Truthful Sinner
    January 5
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    Wow beautiful imagery, keep up the good work.


  • Xfallen-isolationX
    January 2

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    wow=]
    great poem morgana!
    i really like it.....it was almost like in the poem you were losiing someone you loved.....like they were fading away....
    =]


  • oceanbluize
    December 31, 2008

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    The idea of fading memories was brilliant...the final stanza tied the whole piece together. truly amazing poetess! thank you for entering.
    Good Luck,
    Ocean


  • poeticcaresses
    December 30, 2008

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    Wow, this is a beautiful write. I can so completely relate to it as well. Fighting with faded memories to correctly recal the face of a lost loved one. Wonderfully written.


  • couldbeworse
    December 30, 2008

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    fav part:
    What beauty once contained
    in this image, slipped away
    leaving me forever trying to remember
    that love in your face.

    love it

  • Eusebius
    December 30, 2008

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    Lovely and potent poetic phrasings here, deftly woven together to make a most mysterious whole! Loved it! bravo!


  • film noir
    December 30, 2008

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    Sorry twinkey. It didn't mean to wait so long to finish this comment, but you know that things happened since I was writing this originally.

    I had to read this several times, because I found myself missing little gems. lulz

    The second stanza really stood out compared to the other stanzas. It was the most powerful to me. *shrugs*

    - Aly


    • morgana raven Greeters member
      December 30, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment =) doesnt matter how long it took you to do it ^^ much appreciated as always.


  • MichaelBe
    December 30, 2008

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    very strong write bearing such depth and with a really gripping climax, great work

    Michael


  • chilali
    December 30, 2008

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    Wow. So sad. This was so beautiful. I really loved your take on the picture. Your word choice and flow is just amazing and so is your presentation. Great work and all the best to you in the contest.

    Love,
    Ylova


    • morgana raven Greeters member
      December 30, 2008
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      Thank you very very much for the comment ^^ it is much appreciate =)

  • piccola silver member
    December 30, 2008
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    this is so sad. it is beautifully written letting the reader feel which is always a great thing.

  • Zannt
    December 30, 2008

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    awwhh
    nice piece as usual

    commented now
    happy?
    <3 xx

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