time lines do not matter,
nor limits barricade,
I grasp the wheel and turn the key
to my escaping
the past in full parade
of all I have ever been
memories set new place marks
to my destination
I flee between strangers,
who do not know the time
or hear the distant voices,
spirits
who floated promise,
waiting for me,
all of us together knowing never
Author notes
I have attempted to use the metaphor of an elderly person with Alzheimers who has driven away from familiar surroundings. (There have been documented accounts of people driving many hundreds of miles before they are found.) But then again, this is about each one of us.
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Thanks for your suggestions. I thought 'straight line' captured the attitude. Straight lines suggests a series of actions. Again, 'escaping' refers to a state of mind, or attitude. Escape would only indicate the incident. Well, these seem to me to be indicative of the nature of the disease.
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Wow.
That was really cool. I liked the third stanza a lot.
But, I would change 'escaping' to escape, and make 'straight line' plural.
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I enjoyed it
Not very beat around the bush simple clean easy to follow. To try and capture someone else view is a good thing and do it so beautifully I salute you you have done better then I could have. I liked it which is unusually cause i like rhymes even if it didn't hold rhymes it had a hidden depth something you needed to read into and I enjoyed it. I admire your free verse skills Please keep writing.
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Thanks for the author notes. It really gave this poem a meaning--I can hardly wonder why someone with Alzheimer's would drive for hundreds of miles. It's probably nice to be in control of something, even if you don't quite know what you're doing. It's sad, really. You have made me think of Alzheimer's in a new way.
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wow i think this poem is very very good......................
it doesnt make sense in a way but then it does........
i luv it
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this is a thoughtful tender treatment of thoughts comingled with alzheimers.
i love reading your poetry because as soon as i enter your page, i know i am about to be shown the world in a way i had not previously thought of looking at it.
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Excellent
I love this. My Mam died on the first of December from complications due to Alzheimers. It's so hard to imagine the mind's perspective on anything under such circumstances, but you have done a great job here.
I really enjoyed reading this. Thank You.
Love and Laughter,
Chrissie
xxxxxxx
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I appreciated your related comments as well as your connection with this poem. It is an exausting experience to be associated with alzhiemers in any way. Your loss is noted with great understanding and sincere compassion. We cannot do enough for our loved ones and what we do is often received with terrible disregard for our intentions. This is a disease that actually seems to get between us and the victim. What I tried to do with this write was to restore some of the dignity by taking their thoughts seriously.
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