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Ode on a Soft Drink Cup

Oh Soft Drink Cup from a Fast Food Restaurant-
you were beautiful once. You were fresh and dewy
and filled with Dr. Pepper, your ice rattling
with unbridled joy. You are ugly two-thirds empty-
droplets clinging sadly to your straw and lid,
condensation pooling around you.  You are uglier
in the trash can, where you are on your way
to a landfill where you will not decompose.
You will lie there forever like a disgusting
ghost, the faded skull of
wastefulness.

Author notes

squirted out of my brain last night while writing in my journal.
am i being serious? am i being silly? MUAHAHAHAHAAAA!

edit: changed the wording a little. think it sounds better this way.

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  • Big Scrive
    December 30, 2008
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    Awesome and cool. Good write.


  • insanely-crazy
    December 30, 2008
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    YAY! GREAT JOB!

    I love random poems.... and this one i adore! great job chika!! Odes are awsom-ful! YAY!

  • boilerjim
    December 30, 2008

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    Funny

    I started to hate it and then laughed my ass off. I think you might be humorus, Thanks for the thoughts and words.


  • spirit rising
    December 30, 2008

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    i think this sums it up very nicely, i love the line "the faded skull of wastefullness"
    you took the reader on a journey from start to finish you done that very well, not missing anything out, the poem has alot of visual content in there too and i saw everything offered, so very well done, its a very good poem and the message in which it is portraying is a very important one, well done, look forward to reading more of your stuff!!