we picked
buzzard bones
collecting in funeral pyres;
the lamplight
spoke in lumens
like a prophet’s mouth,
forming o's
from smoke wisps.
wooden boards
moan like cinco de mayo,
swollen with pride;
to be carried by burros
on atlas arms
into sun-dried hills.
In a list
A contest entry
- Win $50, and be published in the next Allpoetry Book! by Kevin.
400 points, ended January 15, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i miss youuu!
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I have noticed - you like bones a lot, I think we all have that one word that just kind of stays with us.
Your imagery is very subtle, it makes you feel as if I am really there. -
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this is really good. i loved a few phrases... can't copy paste... not in the mood... but it's goodm don't be too shocked if you get gold for this.
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yay for double account applause, because it's that awesome.
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Interesting. I loved the imagery. You did a truly fascinating job with the prompt.
Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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So good.
"like a prophet's mouth"
LOVE the word 'prophet', the meaning of the word and just, yeah...it felt foreshadowing here and just, freaking awesome.
"moan like cinco de mayo"
May 5th...
that was an awesome insertion of Spanish.
My favorite by you so far.
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Jessica
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Mm breaktaking. I definately wouldn't mind taking a little trip to the spanish foothills for a little dig myself... but then again, I've already got your words to take me there. Best of luck in the contest.
Ashley A. Wolfe
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Oh, I love this... In particular I got stoked about this part
the lamplight
spoke in lumens
like a prophet’s mouth,
forming o's
from smoke wisps.
But then you said;
moan like cinco de mayo
and that is a gem, so fresh and marvelous.
So, yeah, what can I say? You rock.
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i ditto divebar. simply extraordinary; as an anthropology major, and lover of spanish, im particularly fond of this.
"moan like cinco de mayo" ---> oh, yesyes
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Can feel the sweat trickle and the bake of the sun, churning and sweeping the dust and dirt, to find a piece of the grisled past, that never knew it's importance. Liked this!
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so good. another great poem from another great mind. i love it! its so different and kind of cruel sounding, but all the while it was wonderful to read.
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This piece flows so well, and it's very creative. Great job! And good luck
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A very creative take on the prompt. This piece was beyond brilliant. Wonderfully penned. I love how deep this is. The imagery and the metaphors are incredible. I love the last stanza and the ending line You have certainly captivated me with this piece. The title fits perfectly. Is this Gold? Yup! I think it is. Uh-huh. It definitely is! Well done and good luck in the contest.
Love,
Ylova
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wow. yeah. thats about all i can say. really enjoyed this quickie.
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