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A Mother's Kiss

Acidic mists clamber
skyward, regurgitated
from mechanical maws.

The earth is ripped;
blood red gashes opened
as waste is packed into
open wounds and
scabbed over to putrefy
in darkness.

Sparkling streams tumble
mirthfully over beds of
noxious rubble.

Inhaling the rancid
vapors of an uncaring
world, she softly touches
her lips to the tortured land
and exhales life renewed.



Author notes

Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: Art by Julia Starr aka night-fate
60 words exactly

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    January 17

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    An interesting write and interpretation of the picture prompt. Heartfelt. Good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Word count: 60. Thank you for your entry.


  • Hikari Lady
    January 1

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    Your imagery is fantastic! I loved your take on the prompt and how you've sketched a whole world from this picture. The feelings and the words you chose were amazing! It's a real pleasure to read your writes, always.
    Best of luck in the contest.

    Much love
    ~Noor


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    December 30, 2008

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    your take on this prompt is amazing. the imagery is fantastic, and quite vivid. I'm having trouble putting the words together due to lack of sleep. I personally like the last stanza, because how she healed the land and made it whole again.. You did an fabulous job with this poem

    good luck
    kat