This is the inner beast of man
Seething and sitting in its cage
The human world is a desolate land
Our beast has finally unleashed its rage
We all stand lonely and confused
Searching our rugged hearts for hope
Past the chains that won't let us loose
Are only more political ties of rope
But the beast is stil set free
When one person flips a switch
The gas mask of democracy
Can't fix the final glitch
No matter what religion preaches
To this human race of clay
We are still the worlds leeches
And will be until our last day
However flawed the beast may be
However terrible, senseless, and wild
We can still hope for forgiveness and peace
Because the beast is still a child
A contest entry
- Anyone UP For A Nooner? Pic Prompt by lunarlunacy.
400 points, ended January 12, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
For a contest that had an awesome picture prompt :)
Comments
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I enjoy the rhyming pattern, and the overall flow to this..You did well.I like your message as well..Congrats
John
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totally dude!!!
dude this is so awsome!!! my fave part was
"No matter what religion preaches
To this human race of clay
We are still the worlds leeches
And will be until our last day"
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this reminds me of a book i am reading in class called : Lord Of The Flies, dude totally!! but any ways soo awsome love it..(i'm surprise i havent said 'rad' yet...hahahaha)
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impressionistic?
was the first word to come to mind... honestly the rhyme is not my thing but it's still good...
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Wow...I never knew tyou were so politically involved. I love the rhyme and flow, though it is lost a bit in the fourth stanza I think.
The messege is a good one and I love the last stanza...it's rings true to my heart and is a real eye opener.
one lat thing. you forgot an L in the third stanza
well done,
-Dusty-
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