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Life's philosophy

 

 

Colorful symphonies & hip-hop
instruments, collide;
leading dripping blue wetness
to comprehend crystallized tones.

Laser-eyes eager to find
the strings with which this world
is sewed.
Revealing the inner core
of truthful realities;

                        those un-existing.

Crouching wings, waiting
for phenomenal calls to dance
upon the heavy air.
Ringing the water's walls
with Greece’s feathery
songs; thus
                    she
                           drowns
                                       within
                                               

 

 

 

                                      unnoticed

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(C) Noor 12/30/2008 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Contest prompt:
60 words on picture above. (Artwork by Julia Starr aka night-fate)

 

Note: hip-hop, Laser-eyes, un-existing are phrases thus each is counted as ONE word.

 

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    January 17

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    An interesting write and interpretation of the picture prompt. Very nice rhythm. Good flow and tone. Nice imagery and depth of feeling. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Word count: 60. Thank you for your entry.

  • michaeline
    December 31, 2008

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    Good luck in the contest hope that you win.Your take on this picture is deep.Great job on the imagry and flow.The title was perfect.


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 31, 2008

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    Nice one dude,
    you took the picture and made it your own with this write
    Well done and all the best

    Ken


  • yaotecatl
    December 31, 2008

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    Very very nice write. However, being that hip-hop is a hammer to me, "symphonies" did not work for me. I think, and this is just me, that something more pounding than a symphony is required there. Other than that I really enjoyed your writing. :-) yao


    • Hikari Lady
      December 31, 2008
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      Fixed it, I think it makes more sense now. Thank you so much for the point out.
      ~Noor


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL!!!

    The wonderful feeling of dreams and being lost within them! 's

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