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Wage

Deep within its darkness

Hidden from plain view

Grave the chaotic starkness

Turmoil does ensue

 

Epic are the struggles

Fringing on death's promise

Dementia pervades and scuddles

Persuasion they so admonish

 

Screaming ever profusely

Consigned by deafened indifference

Stagnated thoughts convolutely

Depression's reign the incipience...

c2008 vduna

 

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  • insideinsanity
    December 30, 2008

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    Very nice.

    It seems a bit vague, if you were to look for a particular argument, but you cen definitely see the struggle grinding behind the eyes. It almost seems like we're looking at a mind running towards insanity, despite some pull to be otherwise normal.

    But in the last stanza, the lines 'Screaming ever profusely/Consigned by deafened indifference' make me wonder if the reality is that screaming over things that bother you mean that becoming indifferent to something is impossible, simply because the screams have tuned out this reaction.

    Or, then again, maybe I'm reading too much into it, lol.

    A very nice write. Thank you for entering!