Clinging to the edge of the cliff,
looking over my shoulder
as the tide comes in;
the sun begins to set,
I pray I’ll be spared
from being dashed
on the rocks
Words: K.Botka
12/30/08
Author notes
Based on truth....
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #46 by Aussie Gypsy.
600 points, ended January 10, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Such sadness. I think we all feel this way at one or another times. Well done. Best to you in the contest
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LOL...
this was a real event that I could wax prolifically on!
I still have a lot of "issues" surrounding this event & believe it or not this is the first time I've written about it & it happened back in '75! 
This is one of the reasons I've got Ankylosing Spondylitis in my neck & lower spine, not to mention the Osteoarthritis in my mid back & hips! 
It was a very traumatic event & also a Miracle 'cause nothing should have kept me from going over the cliff! I felt a large hand in the small of my back as I was on the very edge & looked over my shoulder to see who was holding me but could see no one.
That's when I looked down & there was about a 150' drop onto jagged rocks as the tide was coming in! I really have to write about this. It was a huge event in my life & the man who saved me was very courageous. Life and death thriller! 
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Strong and vivid imagery...a very scary moment in time upon which you brought the reader into so well...well done in brevity...
Best,
mystic
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Thanks!
I'm rather surprised I managed this as I could wax prolific on this event! I guess writing Haiku/Senryu is helping my writing. 
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Sounds great..nice imagery..I'd love to be standing on a cliff in between life and death..sounds exciting..
nice write, you'll do great in the contest.
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If you were there...
you'd know how exciting, frightening & paralyzing it was! I'll have to write about this again...this was the first time I've written about this event & it happened back in '75! Zuma beach Ca. almost took my life twice. 
One time in the surf & another on it's cliffs! 
The whole chapter of this time of my life is 
of a book, so I'm sure I could write many poems about this. I guess this may be the time to start! I was so lame brained in my twenties I think a big part of me doesn't want to go there! Thanks for reading & your comment! I love that pix you have.
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Wow this is some scary and very vivid imagery.
Not a place I would like to be in.
Splendidly done indeed.
Best of wishes to you always.
Tony
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Well, if you like scary...
and it seems many people here at AP do, then I've got lots of life experience to draw on for writes! I think as I'm struggling so now that I don't want to go there. Perhaps I should. I'm sure many could identify with my pain & struggles & many would be entertained with the shear lunacy I've dealt with! Thanks for reading & your comments!
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