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Whisper

You are a whisper of waters healing might
The walk around the corner of a farmer’s market’s

You are a planet of smiling lavender
My feather in my pocket and my wings on leaves

Sweet rusted angel rest in with me
A shiver and a breath, rock with me tight

Please be present as I paint you my house
A quiet absinthe vision of England’s rusted greens

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  • LionessK silver member
    January 1

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    Wonderfully sweet... your third line is especially lovely. You have painted a vivid picture of love here. Thank you for sharing with us all.
    Keep writing on and enjoy the site.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    Sweetly written.


  • zappa gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    " nice