Small and green
a great healthy start.
Growing fast
living well
soon, too soon,
possibly in fact.
it turns, shades of colors.
then to brown it flows.
losing hold of its place
on the long out stretching branch.
with one light spritz of breeze
its grasp is now broken.
it falls and falls to the ground.
where it lays in its final resting place.
Author notes
life cycle (age 17)
A contest entry
- Lots of Options! by Abnormal.
550 points, ended January 17, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - short by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended December 31, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have way too much punctuation, you don't need it on every line (or almost every line).
A good piece, I would have liked to see just a bit more oomph but that's just my opinion. -
Nice, short and simple! This poem is lovely and goes through everything the leaves go through. Nicely described and you've put this together well. Good job! Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering!
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