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Hot Chocolate!

Our bodies collide,
teasing one another.

We make love,
heat and moans rise;
your chocolaty skin against mine,
whitish.

You taste so good,
I can't stop kissing your lips
or running my hands ALL over you!
You do the same,
then taking my nipples in your mouth,
your naughty fingers
playing between my thighs...

Ecstacy!

You and I
make the perfect
Hot Chocolate!

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  • Darkend
    August 26, 2009
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    delightfully yummy


  • LovetimesLove
    May 6, 2009

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    I may Be a lil Late...

    Hawt Dang!! Chocolate could never be over rated. Mmmm what a delicious contestant you make. I like it alot.


  • tears.of.silence gold member
    April 18, 2009

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    yummo!!! great work. you've got a 4 for this poem giving you a 76. thanks for entering and best of luck to you. kahy


  • TaylorInWonderland
    March 10, 2009

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    amazing

    This poem puts pictures in your mind. Makes me want a big cup of hot chocolate haha. This was an amazing poem. keep writing, you do such a good job. The poem just flows and goes together perfectly. Your word choice for this poem is excellent.
    You and I
    make the perfect
    Hot Chocolate!
    This has to be my favorite part of the poem with the exception of:
    your naughty fingers
    playing between my thighs...
    Amazing.


  • starjacket silver member
    February 20, 2009

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    A very vivid and sensual write! I really like your choice of words and your soft imagery! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with us here at Allpoetry! Best wishes to you!


  • Ms Lez
    February 19, 2009
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    You and I
    make the perfect
    Hot Chocolote!

    Wow!
    you both must be tasted


  • medicalpoet
    February 18, 2009

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    your naughty fingers playing between my thighs... nice line... great erotic poem... good write.
    -medi


  • Eamon
    February 17, 2009

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    Hot Chocolate & A PURE DELIGHT TO READ

    You taste so good,
    I can't stop kissing your lips
    or running my hands ALL over you!
    You do the same,
    then taking my nipples in your mouth,
    your naughty fingers
    playing between my thighs...

    Ecstacy!

    You and I
    make the perfect
    Hot Chocolate!

    SMOOTHLY WRITTEN
    LIKE A LARGE MUG OF HOT CHOCOLATE


  • Bruce silver member
    February 4, 2009
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    Nice job on this one! Great last stanza.


  • sheltered gold member
    January 15, 2009
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    and suddenly this coffee I am drinking
    tastes bland


  • Ms Lez
    December 30, 2008

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    i wanna taste this hot delicious chocolate too. i'm sure you won't mind if i join the plesurable activity


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    LOL! This is great! I love the sensuality in this one.
    Lovely work here and thanks a lot for sharing it!




    Jeremy0826

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