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Lochinvar

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She rests no more upon the hill,
castle walls submerged in brackish green.
The loch has swallowed her whole .

The Faithful Gordon mourns,
Queen Mary's most unjust demise,
No longer free to roam her verdant shores.

Lochinvar fair castle rises not

above the shining loch in Galloway's hills,

So sing the bards with angelic voice.


Of echos past laughter rustling through,

the gray green trees and heathered hills

whisper riotlessly, yet no one hears.

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the gray green color of hills of Scotland and the silent lochs. picture wilipedia

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  • jantastic gold member
    February 5

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    I stopped by your page and saw the title of this one and had to read. I have roots in Ullapool. Do you have a Lochinver connection? Makes me long for the highlands. I noticed one small grammatical error - Queen Marys needs an apostrophe.

    Lovely.


    • Draig aine gold member
      February 5
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      thank you

      no connection in this life, but family roots are strong, thank you for your comments

  • Eusebius
    February 4

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    Oh, I can nearly smell the heather in this one! Wonderful, a twice potent poem (Lochinvar riding out of the west) a perfect poem with illo!


  • The Fun House silver member
    January 28

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    What a great tale this is. Starts strong and invites you to venture forth and ends leaving you pondering, listening...yes, this is poetry indeed


  • Dark Otter
    January 2

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    Your poetry

    keeps changing, growing and evolving. I read this twice and came up with the same conclusion this is a nice piece of poetry that you should take pride in.


    • Draig aine gold member
      January 28

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      ah Otter

      you must say this to all the poetesses
      keep changing so they can not catch me standing still!!!

      love you

      Annie


      • Dark Otter
        January 28
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        Its true!

        I like its pacing, word choice and content. I looked at it twice and still didn't find anything to criticize. You are developing a really nice voice and the talent to use it.


  • Skybow silver member
    December 30, 2008

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    There's the Bard I know and love to read so much. You write as if you were there and are but remembering it.

    Wonderful poem;

    "Of echos past laughter rustling through,
    the gray green trees and heathered hills
    whisper riotlessly, yet no one hears.

    Great last verse, luck in the contest too my friend.

    • Draig aine gold member
      December 31, 2008
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      My humble thanks

      ah but in my dreams I was there. almost the same thing


  • Haygood gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    You see what is not there to see...and describe it. Nice.

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