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The Victim

Lips locked tight bleed
as teeth tear though ancient scabs and silent secrets.
Squinting eyes peer at the raptor,
the diving bird of prey--
bloodthirsty, greedy, lacking emotion except for a wicked passion,
cold, and without remorse--
and the Victim's scarred hands block out all visions of predatory acts,
living nightmares of unending agony,
of him coming down upon her with bared teeth,
and heaving chest,
and foaming mouth.

Vocal chords rebel--they do not heed a warning to the blind and deaf outside,
lacking witnesses nor passers-by.
Alcohol numbs the tongue but does not numb the pain.
Fists clench and try to defend and bruise, but to no avail--
he's got her wrists trapped
and mouth mute from pain-induced paralysis,
laced with horror and streaming tears.
And he takes her
and rips her apart
and steals both breath and purity,
and makes her his Victim.
The raptor.
The nightmare.
The beast.

She couldn't scream.

She doesn't wish on stars anymore.

Author notes

Note for Contest: Links to other poems

"Decay" : http://allpoetry.com/poem/5039345
"Transparency" : http://allpoetry.com/poem/4523767
"Declination" : http://allpoetry.com/poem/5137267
"Frozen" : http://allpoetry.com/poem/4609125

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This was inspired by "Speak", a novel by Laurie Halse Anderson. Melinda Sordino, the main character, is an outcast at school because of the decision to call the cops at a party--which naturally made everyone shun her. But her soon-to-be-ex-friends did not realize that she had called for a legitimate reason--she was attacked and raped by a senior.

Melinda fights throughout the entire book to learn to express herself, both in words and through art, which is her hobby and talent. But most of all, she must find out how to gain the courage to SPEAK and tell the truth to everyone.

It is a wonderfully written story. Though it is dark, there is a lot of humor-- I fell in love with how Anderson portrayed Melinda. She is constantly insulting everyone else around her, living in her own imaginary world, etc...I often found myself laughing out loud at her thoughts.

Read that story. Now.
And sorry that I ruined it >_<

Unfortunately, I decided to focus on the darker part of the story--the memory of being raped.

Tell me what you think.

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  • SoundsOfSilence
    March 20

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    Okay, I can see the connection to the book (great thing I have read it, or I would have been kinda mad ;} )
    This is a nice write. It is touching, and powerful, and I can relate to it.

    Thanks for your entries.

    ~~Kitten


  • poetryality silver member
    January 21

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    You bring the book to life with your poetry. You also make me curious about reading the book you refer to as inspiration. Although this poem is dark, it is expertly written. Great job authoress.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee

  • muhrisa
    December 29, 2008

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    I never read the book but it's a great movie. I loved your poem it send like it could have been written by Melinda herself.


    • Nienna Calmcacil
      December 30, 2008
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      It's a movie!? Wow. Didn't know that. Maybe I'll go see it sometime.

      Thank you for your comment =)