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Sipping Patience

I find myself sipping patience
Every single day
It's all I can do
Without just leaving the fray

  He keeps on hurting her
  And I have no idea what to do
  I wish things with them would just be over
  I wish their relationship was through

Her tears stain her dress
And I can see her newest scar
I've hoped and prayed there was something I could do
Than just sit here, afar

      But I heard he has left
      And she isn't hearbroken
      I'm so happy
      That she's safe, my friend, my token

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  • Symphony
    April 6

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    i LOVE the idea behind this, of 'sipping patience' - brilliant.

    But, thought the last line was too forced 'token' seems so much less than what your friend is to you.

    thanks for entering.


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    January 10

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    Awww, this is very sweet, I can sense the concern and thoughtfulness Fits the description nicely


  • serenity silvermoon
    January 4

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    this was very sad if this is a true poem i want to hurt whoever hurt you this is a winner anouther great poem from you keep up the great work i would not change anything on this poem it was all very beautiful


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    December 31, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write on a sensitive topic. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one.


  • Hope Angel silver member
    December 29, 2008

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    Aww this is a beautiful write. I loved your unique take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest.
    ♥ Jade


  • KayJay
    December 29, 2008

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    Sad but a powerful write. Creating beauty amidst the ugliness is a true gift... well done and best of luck.
    Ken

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