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The Demise

Many knots travelled through stormy seas

Finding  haven midst seasons of gales,

 

Even while reefs and shoals did find,

She found safe anchor and many a sail!

 

But oh the schooner of knots in a trip

Though having weathered years of storms

 

The beautiful craft "Enduring Forever"

Is dashed  upon rocks, finished, forlorn!

Author notes

"So many a ship leaves port on a new journey in life....some make it and retire as ships on the sea of life....some become shipwrecks unfortunately..The ship of course is a metaphor on marriage....some last, and some do not..."on the rocks"

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  • individuality gold member
    April 24
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    a good poem, these days i think marriage does not last as say one hundred years ago or for some even less than that time, many today are divorced or separated after just a few short years whereas i remember as a kid most people lasted a lot longer. maybe it is just the times and later it will revert back to how it used to be.


  • Jonbug gold member
    March 26

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    Good work! this short paints quite a picture for just a few words! I love the ship's name and I was a bit sad when it was dashed against the shore.


  • Heroesrox
    March 14

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    Very well done, Rosemary! Keep up the stunning work! You should have won something in that contest!


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 10
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    This is an interesting piece with wonderful images well done. Best to you in the contest


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 8
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    Thank you Umi...Have made changes.,..Thank you for your constructive critiquing of my poem...Always appreciated!


  • Umi Juvariel
    January 8
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    The only thing I didn't like, other than the pink against blue that made my eyes strain was the constant use of 'so many.' Other than that, I loved this poem. It was a great metaphor, and that the alliteration in the end was well done. The word choice was almost perfect, and the ideas it carried with it were well chosen. Overall, a very wonderful piece. Great job.


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    January 6
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    wonderful


    Hello sweet soul, you have penned this wonderfully.You are so right about marriages. I enjoyed reading every word, could not pick out a single thing that might of needed a change.your write is perfect and you have been a real pleasure to read.I wish you all the best in the contest my friend.
    Much love and happiness to you.
    Angel-anne

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