Mortalia has returned
Stay away from shadows, my love,
stay here within the light.
Darkness has fallen outside our home and
even the werewolves shriek in fright.
Mortalia has once more appeared
in all her unholy beauty.
Taking the innocents to her breast;
enticing them to heed her song
of death with no mercy.
She lurks outside the pantry door
waiting for the maids and men.
Delicious, evil thoughts reside
as her fangs drip with venom.
Once you are within her grasp
there is no hope left for you.
You'll scream inside your very soul;
her laughter is your cue.
Heaven's gate is out of sight
as her plaything you become.
Dancing torture every night,
until daylight makes her scream.
"Come dance for me," she whispers
through the unlocked door,
"Come dance with me, my sweetling,
for your innocence I need."
Stay away from the shadows, my love,
stay here within the light.
Mortalia has returned to town
and for your soul she sings.
A contest entry
- Darkwrite challenge (round 1) by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
550 points, ended January 10, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh My Word~
Love how You penned this and the images also the Title with character- Very Creative
Bravo!!
Excellent take on the prompt~
also adore the words:
her laughter is your cue
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Take heed to repetition I say, the melody in this sounds haunting, but from the kind of caring this seems, is seemingly like one of them ghosts that dont leave, but remain as protector. lovely piece. This more hopeful but dark all the same.
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Interesting interpretation Will! I had not looked at this piece from that perspective before. While dark, you are correct, there is a protectiveness from the point of the speaker over a third party! LOL... thanks for the new angle of view.
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Mortalia has been around a bit then? This is nice so it will be a good thing to see her again from time to time. Dark as evil itself, yet too beautiful to resist. Very well done Sheila
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I think you nailed the prompt brilliantly,
the rhyme and flow was flawless.
Well penned here poetess
and all the best to you in the challenge
Ken
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Well I think this is someone I need to meet! I like her already An excellent piece, the way is paved for more tales of Mortalia. Much enjoyed, thanks for entering and good luck
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Very nice.
I think I no her! (Once you are within her grasp
there is no hope left for you.) That gave me chill.
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it should give you chills. Mortalia is not the nicest entity in the universe. i am glad that you got chills. This one that I thought was a "pretty" piece, not my usual creep someone out work... mmmmuuuuuuuhhhhhahahahahahahahaha!
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She has been away too long.
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Ahhhh, but look around you... war is her favorite pasttime and she is heavily recruiting in those areas. Death is her partner and he guides her with skill and coarse beauty in the Dance of Death by War.
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Once you are within her grasp
there is no hope left for you.
You'll scream inside your very soul;
her laughter is your cue.
Awesome stanza here. I think there is alot of imagery here. A very good take on the lyric prompt.
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glad you liked it... it took me a while to figure this one out... lol
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Ooooo, spooky! *chills*
All the best sis!
Love, Michael.
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thank you very much dearest
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I like it. It's fantasy-based and dark, and I obviously like both.
You did a lovely job weaving this piece and creating imagery for the reader. Well done.
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thank you dearest... I needed to hear some praise on this piece. I felt it was missing my usual gore and such. It is almost "pretty". lololol
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Elegant dark pieces re just as brilliant as gore-filled ones. Myself, I tend tolike the elegant ones a tad more.
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