The Queen doth rise on Golden wings,
in flowing white she flies,
reality distorting things,
she's blind to all the lies.
The world around her changing fast,
and bending to her will,
a wake is formed by all thats passed
of orphean dreams that thrill...
Illusion is her only friend,
her mind, a world of dreams.
Where days that never seem to end,
and nothing's as it seems.
Flying dragons pass her by,
enchanted woods entice.
No more she dares to question why,
the thoughts of men and mice.
Beholdened to a fractured mind,
she'll laugh and dance and play.
Escaping from a world so blind,
so cold to her dismay.
Soon will come a time when she
must take the journey back.
To face the world that she did flee,
And set her life on track.
A quest she takes to be returned,
an amulet of gold.
That takes the souls that have been burned,
back to that world so cold.
It opens up a door in oak,
and leads to wizard's shore.
Sail home on thoughts and words he spoke,
and so this world's no more...
Author notes
Lyrics prompt: World of Make Believe by Within Temptation
Not sure I've done it right & its two lines over the thirty due to the rhyme scheme.
Let me know if I should change it or darken it some more.
I'm not great at lyrics inspired, but I did my best...
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A contest entry
- Darkwrite challenge (round 1) by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
550 points, ended January 10, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is very very excellent big brother you did aN An absolutely fantastic job with this piece its so perfect!!! This is very deep and dark!!!!! powerfully written!!!!! Your words and flow are so magnificent!!!!! This is truly incredible!!!! You never do cease to impress me with how amazing all ur pieces are!!!! They are each so truly special!!!!! You did a wonderful job!!!! I love it!!!!! HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!! I LOVE U!!!! BIG BIG BIG HUGS!!!!!!! You are so amazing and wonderful big brother!!!!!!!!!!! I hope u have an awesome day!!!!!!!!!
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So well expressed.
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Beautiful! That last stanza is my absolute favourite! Bravo!
Mariana
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Wow, this is quite the tale. The rhyme is wrapped with a great beat. Very, very nicely done. Thank you for entering and good luck
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Ah. Once again I love your skill at a story. This is very well done and the rhyme is happily unforced. . .I agree with PastelMoons
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Beautiful! Magical!
I feel enchanted after reading
this masterful write
Good luck
~Pastel
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I really liked this one. I think you did well with the storyline and how you told it as well. The rhyme here does not seem forced at all. I will consult with the other judges about the line count as I personaly tend to be strict about that.
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A really good take on the prompt Fritz. Excellent flow and lovely story line, pretty near perfection in my opinion
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I love your darker writes, they really transport me to somewhere else. Great, great , great. Hope your holidays went wonderfully.
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wow fritz... seems your relaxing getaway only caused your poetic beauty to flair
this was outstanding- plus i love within temptation. this was a really good take on the lyrical prompt- "Illusion is her only friend,
her mind, a world of dreams.
Where days that never seem to end,
and nothing's as it seems.
Flying dragons pass her by,
enchanted woods entice.
No more she dares to question why,
the thoughts of men and mice" - i think that was your strongest stanza. well anywho you rock and good luck with the contest my poet friend
-T
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Ooooooooo.... I like this!
I have the song this is prompted from,and I think you have done a great job here.
I love the picture it paints in my mind......
Great piece, as usual! lol!
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