Rewritten songs

Cactus-green words
Swim in her vision; tolerated.

Isolated parchments surround
her encapsulating world;
feeding her dripping sadness.

She fallows her inner sanctuary
to reach the moon.

Blooming in the pot of his life
Painting wounded memories

As renewing hopes.

Author notes

Contest prompt: 30-40 words on "Moon flower"
Picture found on Google.

Thanks for reading!

In a list

A contest entry

Prompt Contest 10 entries 30 to 40 words by mysticstorm. 600 points, ended December 30, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
BATTLE OF THE GOLDS Freeverse by Swan song. 1300 points, ended January 6, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Antebellum
May 6
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speachless
wow..
amazing.
SimplyNoodle
February 10
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congrats on the trouphies, keep up the good writes!!
~Chelsey
IxI
January 31

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beautiful
the words you chose sounded a little bizzare at first but the more i read, the words seemed to bloom in front of me. this was a unique write. nice work
IXI
untouched pages
January 26
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the emotion is amazing.. I'm left speachless..wow... thank you for penning this gorgeous poem!!
purplemoon
January 21

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Beautifully Composed
Oh My God this is so good You put so much emotion into this small poem. it left me breathless. the mental pic you painted was .......just wow.
ElectricBloom
January 19

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beautiful.
im literally left in awe.
such gorgeous imagery and description is held throughout, really kept my attention. you have said so much in so few words.

congrats on the trophies.

ElectricBloom
Harrisham Minhas
January 6

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Well-crafted.
Congrats on the trophies!
Swan song
January 6
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spung gold!!!
ConjurerCaptainTam
January 3

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Lovely, your words were captivating and your use of vocab was broad.

thanks for sharing

Tammy x
Rhythm Child
January 1

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very well worded and the picture was beautiful

happy new year
Kathraina
December 31, 2008
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This is a wonderful. I love the words you used. Bravo!

♥ Kathraina
Draig aine
December 31, 2008
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well done
clean, well expressed with few words, well done
michaeline
December 31, 2008

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I can see why you won gold.Your words and take on the prompt was perfect.Your words flowed with ease all the way through and the imagry was really good.Congrats on the gold and I am glad tha I got the chance to read this.I would ot revise it or chage a thing.It's perfect as it is written.
mysticstorm
December 29, 2008

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Very beautiful and gentle...touched by sadness, yet left to close in hope...wonderful work...

thank you for sharing...

mystic