The illusion of fortune
is a camouflaged trap.
It’s a oneway ticket
on a "how to fail" map.
Author notes
Kevin Pace, WordsDoMatter
In a list
A contest entry
- #37 PICTURE INSPIRED (: by Walk-Free.
650 points, ended December 30, 2008, 15 entries
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Comments
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well done!
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thanks
for reading - Kevin
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"a oneway ticket
on a "how to fail" map"
brilliantly clever ending
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Quite insightful. I enjoyed this.
Nice work with brevity. ~Pamela 
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Brevity...
such a cool word... to pack a lot in a little... that itself says a lot, that being said, (without the benefit of brevity), I thank you for your thoughtful words and time you took to review this piece. Both are appreciated - Kevin
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I really enjoyed the rhyme Kevin. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Ylova
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thanks
for your time... the statement is true you know... oh, how much time I could have saved... oh well, maybe someone will listen. thanks - Kevin -
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Yes, it is very true
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Wow!! Nice rythme and beautiful imagery. I really enjoyed this and it took the prompt in a unique way. Best of luck in the contest.
Much love
~Noor -
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thanks
yeah, that one came out of no-where (well, it came out of somewhere, I just don't know where) I like to just let the rhyme dictate the flow of the piece. (that takes any pressure off of me - lol) - sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. thanks for your time - Kevin
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