It's late at night,
Had a few drinks, feel just right.
A stranger walks up to her as she sloppily lights a cigarette,
This is a night she will never forget.
He doesn't say a word, not even his name, as he takes her by the hand,
This isn't what she had planned.
In the dark alley, he pushes her against the wall,
She knows she should stop but he's so handsome and tall.
She tries to fight as their lips meet,
But then she kisses him back in defeat.
Her cigarette she suddenly drops,
As she hears loud tears and pops.
She realized that he had ripped off her skirt,
And was now unbuttoning her shirt.
She wants to scream,
This is way too extreme.
As if he read her mind, he gave her a sweet kiss,
She was quiet, this was a sinner's bliss.
He ran his hands all over her body, groping below,
As she felt him grow.
He unzipped his pants and lifted her up against the cold bricks,
And she knew that he wasn't putting on any tricks.
He shoved himself into her before she could move her hips,
A moan of pleasure and shock escaped her lips.
He kept going faster, harder, more and more,
As he called her a filthy whore.
Her moans were getting very loud,
He just loves hearing that sound.
She suddenly started to shake,
Her orgasm very close, for her sake.
As she orgasms, the man takes out a knife,
And stabs her, trying to take her life.
She moans so loud and then she starts to scream and yelp,
But too bad there's no one there to help.
Always listen to what mommy tells you and don't fuck with strangers, he said,
As he stabbed her until she was dead.
Author notes
This is new for me. This is the first poem that I've written on a topic like this. Please don't be judgemental; I write about everything.
Tell me what you think.
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this is really good!
your description allows for the reader to actually visualize this.
it's sad, and intriguing at the same time.
i liked how the rapist actually taught her a lesson right before he killed her... right before it was too late. :]
great job
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Thanks a lot! Yes, it was the most basic lesson in life - and she broke it =)
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I love it! The way you say at the end "listen to what your mommy tells you and don't fuck with strangers" is such a great ending the way you combine your poetry with something we have been learning wince we were kids. Your a very talented poet. And thank you for sharing!
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Thank you very much! =) I try to write as if i were there you know? So the reader can feel all the emotions - the emotions of the man, the woman, the alley.
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i really like your style... i've read some of your poems and they kinda have a edger allen poe feel to them... i dont know if i'm the only one whos said that or caught on. do you like his work?
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Thanks! I like some of his work even though it is very depressing.
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"As if he read her mind, he gave her a sweet kiss'
She was quiet, this was a sinner's bliss.
He ran his hands all over her body, groping below,
As she felt him grow."
It's wonderful! It turns me on, baby!
The end is so stragic. I wish it could have ended in a pleasureful way.
I love this poem. You're marvelous, hunny
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Aw thanks very much!!!
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You're welcome sweet baby!
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WOW! That was touching, I felt really bad for the girl. Very erotic(despite that erotic feeling coming from a rape) because as the reader you could imagine all of this happening to this poor girl. Also, you did a very good job at describing how much this guy was using her(besides the rape itself, calling her a filthy whore and it all concludes with him killing her.) I loved the ending, how you had him(as he's killing her) tell her one of the(if not;the) most basic lesson in life.
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Aw thanks! It's great to hear some feedback on my poems since no one ever effing comments! =) Oh I added you to friends if that's okay but thank you so much for the feedback, it's nice to hear someone comment on this poem.
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