Her blonde braids
stole the sun.
Cold metal
pierced through pale skin.
Crimson
stained literary assignment.
-What have I done?-
Author notes
Prompt: Picture above
Credit: http://bucz.deviantart.com/art/Conscience-41966098
20 Words
In a list
A contest entry
- 10/20/20 Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
970 points, ended December 29, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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Wonderful
Very well expressed. Such great write. Thank you for sharing. -
The ending floored me
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The ending is stunning, and it just hits you in the face. The poem is adorable too, the words, the meaning, love it.
Best of luck next time
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This is a fantastic poem you have written.
Splendidly vivid in dark words of regret.
Thanks for sharing your talent.
May you be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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~Sweet!
Now,
this is deep stuff here Y!
I wish I weren't a freebie here I'd put up pics in my poems too. I liked the free gold at first. I'll be keepin' my eyes out for your writing too!
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Thank you for your comment
It is greatly appreciated. Glad you enjoyed my poem
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a brilliant take onthe promt your imagery is wonderful as always good luck inthe contest
maralisa
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A good dark piece here...different aspects brought together well in this short piece!
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the imagery within this piece is amazing and very dark. your take on the prompt is excellent, you brought this pic to life with your words.
good luck
kat
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Excellent
Very powerful creation. So captures the picture perfectly. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow. What a brilliant image.
I love your take on the prompt and you chose amazing words to create the story in my mind
Good luck in the contest
Shari
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"A little water clears us of this deed."
Interesting perspective here. You've created some rather strong imagery and contrast with these words. Best of luck to you.
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