Black stilettos, tight jeans
Red heat aura
pouty lips, rounded hips
calling your name
big green eyes, her innocence
forget your name, good bye self
long legs, blond hair
oh this angel could take you there
join her now
she kneels by the Christ child to pray
another woman out on Christmas day
take a deep breath man,walk away.
Author notes
Adult
Stiletto - 902643 Lancome lipstick
I found the shade of this color in my lipstick and I love it .
I did not know this was a shade.
A contest entry
- Hues of Red in 12 Lines or Less (there's a catch) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended January 3, 19 entries
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well done
What great lines.
she kneels by the Christ child to pray
another woman out on Christmas day
take a deep breath man,walk away.
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Very nice done. I am familiar with that shade actually and it's nice. Great images depicted in this piece and I like the subtle yet raw feel.
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LOVELY.
Very, very nice. I wouldn't've pegged it as a hooker for the first part, and definitely not after the last. Hehe, good stuff.
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Perfect description. And This is pretty neat. I like the picture it displays, I might have to go out like that sometime. Great job, I really liked this poem especially the lines:
forget your name, good bye self
take a deep breath man,walk away.
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Very nice write girl, nice twist at the end, taking a deep breath.
Best wishes in the contest
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wow
nice n steamy..oh and the shade of lipstick? hot!
yeah..this is a good one for sure my friend!
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When are we going dancing? I got a new belt for Christmas, with indian head nickles on it.
Joe
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you smooth talking cowboy, how I would love to go dancing !
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A deceptive piece this one. Mind you, must he walk away??? Your lipstick shade, sadly, is not the best mix with black for those of us with poor eyesight. You can afford Lancome lipstick......WOW!!!!! LOL
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thirty bucks a tube I know I know but you know some things a woman just does not skimp on her make up that does not look like make up and her undies... now you know all my secrets.
oh I but I made you smile. This is hard to read.
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Sounds like...
One hot momma! All the guys check'n you out were they?
Great poem here sis.
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About time you showed up big brother, I worry and I worry .
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Love the twist at the end. I think the layout of the poem is original and the rapid beat and staccato rhythm are something to remember.
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The last three lines are great! One of your best poems.
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Hey John , thank you try to dive into the minds of men . we like to look nice and we are nice it is hard sometimes when you are tall like my daughter and my self you stand out. dressing down gets old .
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