L is for the simple seat
O is for the surprise I see
V is for the slingshot aimed
E is for the sound you made
Y is for my simple tree
O is for you coming after me
U is for the ground I found
! Is for the impact sound.
Author notes
Okay to get this poem you need to look at the first letter in every line, it relates to the image conveyed or a sound that is provoked by the actions the line describes. Hope that just made sense. Tell me what you think though.
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This is a cute and succint poem, and I love the message of the acrostic. However, I will say one thing about acrostics- usually they lines relate to the letter for example
C is for your cool attitude
A is for your adorable face
T is for your tenderness
etc. (I know this is a really bad example. . .) But the idea is that you use the letter somewhere in the line. However, this is still a very cute poem. I would try writing a more traditional one sometime in your future too! They can be a bit harder, but they force you to be creative. However, they need not necessarily rhyme. -
I thought this really worked well, it had beauty and the use of acrostic was great.
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haha, smart idea. That is definately creative so well done even though I didn't get it fully untill after I read the note you made.
This poem seems simple from he first read of it but actually it is quite clever so I want to say that you did a good job. I think the last line is my favourite, it made me laugh. I am not sure what to think about the title, I have mixed feelings - on the one hand its appropriate but on the other hand its not very catchy.
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When did I miss this one?
I love it! I will admit, I had to read your notes to get the full impact, but that is ok too! You did a great job on this one!
I hope this takes something besides Honorable mention in the next contest! It is a gold to me!
and love little brother
Nyetta
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Judged-ola!
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this is good. i didnt understand until y explained it in the author notes. very well done...thought provoking piece.
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Awhhh.
I love that last line especially.
"! Is for the impact sound."
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Hmm...interesting piece. I think it's sweet as honey! Great job! ^.^
♥ Kathraina
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This is good. I didn't completely understand all the letters in correspondance with their sentence, but I understood at least half. It sounds real nice when reading and is real sweet. Good job.
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