Wintry icy gems
sculpt their white drift necklaces
with frozen luster,
made into angels and men,
pearls unless snow was yellow.
Author notes
Tanka - using syllable count of 5, 7, 5, 7, 7
Image from:
http://www.filebuzz.com/software_screenshot/full/71514-_D_Snow_Dance.jpg
A contest entry
- New Year, Haiku or short forms by misticmoonlite.
495 points, ended December 30, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow...................!
...... fantastic use of imagery here.. a really well written poem.. perhaps i love this one the most.. is really great!
-Lemon Bee-
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a delightful poem I love your imagrey good luck inthe contest
maralisa
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I loved the imagery in this. It actually made me a little chilly
That last line made me laugh out loud because it made me picture all the little yellow spots in the snow that our dog used to make when I lived in New York.
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Beautiful wording and images! well, except the last line....lol
best wishes in your contest
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Brilliant
Wonderful winterland write, snow angels and snowmen, what fun it is to play in the snow unless as you said it's yellow.
Well done, good luck in the contest. -
VOE
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very nice Tanka, love the imingery you painted in the snow, thank you for this entry good luck
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This is great.
Where I am in Australia we don't get all that much snow and so I enjoyed this, seeing the snowflakes falling in front of me
Shari
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Awesome Brother!
Yea, you have to watch that yellow snow.
Thanks for sharing, wonderfully penned once again.
All the best in the contest!
Peace.
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I have had more than my fair share of snow thank you! Two feet in two days, after the ice storm was more than enough! But you did a great job on this one!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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