It will always
suck me in.
Even weeks away
I hunt it out
licking my lips
in antisipation.
Plotting for days
the perfect acquisition
of my dictator.
He sold my skin
so continually I hunger
for him to drain me
of all control.
Even imminent pain
cannot dissuad me.
Though parasitic, his love
tastes brilliant
and becomes me
begining the journey
embalming my blood
lingering in my cells
grabbing hold onto
my brain.
Locking in the code
so to never leave
me alone.
Author notes
personally i love this one. please tell me what you think. please please comment
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Oh. This is an interesting poem that you have penned in here. I don't know if its because of the deep red borders or because I saw Twilight recently but this makes me think of vampires and those that feel vunerable. Lestways, that's what I think of. I thought you did a good job of express yourself.
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this is a really powerful piece and I think your word usage was very effective. I also liked your uses of line breaks to enhance meaning. it definitely drew me in.. i got the sense that although you yearn for the acquisition of "your dictator," it breaks you down, and the unbalanced relationship between you is something you feel that you NEED, although it's hurting you. i was actually kind of scared for you. my only suggestion is to review your spelling. their were a few errors that temporarily distracted me from the poem itself
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