through the ages
eons of time
have left their mark
upon shore and sea
what stories are held
within those shores
in the footprints
long washed away
a myriad of souls
share this soil
each stone a slice of time
each wave a rebirth
secrets of the sea
wash ashore one by one
then return untold
to their watery home
the solitude of this place
so quiet, so alone
becomes a space in time
once more shared
dee garner
© December 29, 2008
Author notes
Option: I want a picture prompt
In a list
A contest entry
- ***I PICK FOR YOU :-P*** by cbsbecm88.
625 points, ended January 27, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I see the joy in your writing. Even in solitude you paint a picture of beauty. And at the same time you recognize how everything is connected - not always in obvious ways - yet always connected. Deep soul, thank you. Crystallady
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Love your poem
This will go into my favorites
if I can figure out how to do it
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Thank you, Richard. And to put a poem into your favorites, look to the right sidebar on the poem page under view options and you'll see 'add bookmark' Just click on that
I'm glad you like the poem
Dee
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love your poem
This one will go into my favorites
R.Diem
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excellent~
This is fantastic
Loved every single verse...
You should definitely get a trophy for this one
It's great
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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Wow fantastic! I love the freeverse to this and the beauty you 'show' me is great! Really welldone huni, the stories told by the sea that are un spoken! Thats why i dive, its fascinating! X
Goodluck
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This is precisely the reason I find shell collecting so fascinating. It's up to me to tell their story either by creating a piece of jewelry or a work of art or by studying life science of the maker of the shell.
You've presented your thoughts beautifully here. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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There are indeed many lovely sea shells. I remember as a kid we'd collect just about every shell we could find... wow, that was so many years ago, some of the critters who lived in them are probably extinct by now
Thanks for reading and commenting
Dee
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I especially loved the second last stanza. It added such truth to the concept of your piece. A really beautiful and real write - so true, I couldn't agree more. Your comparison was well done.
"a wave of rebirth"
-- that was such a brilliant idea to add onto the metaphor. Well written.
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You got INSIDE of Nature here and our relationship to it in time. Very strong and deep.
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Oh My~
Wow this is a Beauty and just Love how You presented this along with the energy evoked
Adore the line: a myriad of souls
Just Love that line~
You took the picture to a whole new level
The message touches deep
I felt a sense of Serenity after inhaling Your write
A very good thing-
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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beautiful the memories locked in the pools and rocks,,, good luck poet
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excellent~
This is great sis
Indeed I would love to hear some of the stories I know they have heard over time........wouldn't they be doozies now????
Reads beautiful..wonderful flow...
And fantastic free verse....I am getting better with free verse hated it for the longest of times LOL but this is beautiful
Best of luck in the contest........this is a winner in my book
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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i would say all the things i like about this poem but the list wouldn't fit in this box! i loved your wonderful description and you also had great metaphors! i'm not sure i can pinpoint what it is, but i just really love something about this poem! thank you so much and good luck!
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I read,reread, and read once again. Feeling the sea and watching the waves crash down within each delicate verse penned.
So many stories have yet to be said, and so many viewers yet to leave their mark with this treasure found on the sea.
When they are done reading this piece and go to another they will feel that place of solitude and some will never want to leave it while others struggle to get out of it.
Either way they will know tho they feel alone or think they are they will know they aren't because the sea angels will watch over them and in time their fears will be washed away and they are rebirthed anew.
I love you granna.
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. A great expression. Best of luck in the contest.
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Beautifully said
Outstanding free verse! What would those shores have to say? No one knows.What a great mystery, and perhaps it is best left a mystery, because mystery is a very important element of life. Happy New Year to you and your kitty kats.
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wow, that was nice...you did a good job. and I see you even got a comment from Don...good luck in the contest...
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"a space in time once more shared"..... neat line....
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serene indeed
In natural places our individuality or ego recedes, and we become just one of many, or one with all. You capture the ocean feeling and remind me of the Zen koan, "the ox is slow but the earth is patient." Lovely, best of luck!
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Beautiful write ...
with the silent poem of timelessness and the mystery of the universe between the lines. Life goes on, with ebb and flow, until we are united once again and all our dreams One.
Love to you, Dee.
Myra
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thank you soo much for your good descriptions! other peoples pictures have been hard to pick out! please describe this picture to me! hope it's serene enough:
http://nature.wallpaperme.com/2147-
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I must be doing something wrong... I've been unable to get a picture with this. Some of the address seems to not be in the proper form but I tried typing in the rest of it and still didn't get it to work. I did get a page with a lot of pictures listed by catagory but that's all... HELP
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yeah i think that there is someting wrong with that link now that i look at it sorry! here i'll try to fix it...
http://nature.wallpaperme.com/2147-2/Serene+Shore.jpg
i hope that works if not just message me again and i will try to get you another pic that works :-) good luck! hope it works! -
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It worked this time, thank you for resending it
Dee
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I like Moxie. End of story.
No, I never stop blabbing that easy! I like free verse, and rhyme and prose and...heck I even like sticky caps.
I'm not much for writing sentimental stuff...when I try to write it, it always ends up as a 'shocking tale of horror.'
Yep, I'll try to make it back here when you have written to the prompt.
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