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New Year's Party

Who are these strangers
buoyed by love and alcohol
singing auld land syne?

A contest entry

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  • just mercedes gold member
    January 17
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    This made me feel alientaion in a crowd, and it was uncomfortable. Succinct.


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    January 4

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    Ha! I was going to ding you for an extra syllable in the second line, but I guess "buoyed" really is a single syllable. My local patois as a child added extra syllables to everything FIE-yur, FOW-ul for fire and fowl, etc. So, nice job... hope you survived the holidays.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    lol, good one funny and salute to the old and hello to the new, thank you for this entry, good luck
    voe