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Scars that mark you

Crystal tears bleed from my soul
scars of silence and painful memories
just don't heal quick enough

Forcing myself to fake a smile
when all I want to do is just cry
pretending my heart is still whole
as the pieces have just broken

Its the feeling of a skinned knee
vulnerable- and open to the air
as rubbing alcohol cleans it

Making my friends come with me,now
because I'm terrified I'll walk away
Look back and they'll have disappeared
as if they never existed in the first place


Every few steps away I take
Towards forgetting the loneliness
ends in remembering vividly

looking for my friends at lunch
and knowing in a striking instant
they were talking and laughing about me
and that it would never be the same


Fighting the urge to pull away
and sink into the dark shadows
waiting for the fall to come

Whispered joking secrets spoke around me
are the spark for a cascade of pain squeezing my heart
brought back to the cruel comments
spoken just loud enough for me to hear


three months of shunning
being Isolated so I’d break down
Flaunting their exclusive friendship

Listening to my ipod at Lunch
They were afraid others would notice
If they lost the image of no conflict
Didn’t matter- I was still outcast

When they were bored
Pretended to let me in again
A hilarious game- I just didn’t laugh

Notes about exclusive sleepovers
Passed through me to each other
reminders of how much I’d lost
as if I could forget- existing on the fringe












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  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 27

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    very well written but so sad. in at least one place you left the apostrophe out of it's. thank you for sharing it with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • Jazzlyn
    April 1
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    very good
    i know this all to well
    good luck in my contest


  • ScarletO gold member
    March 16
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    The more I read this , the more I felt the pain of it all. It also made me mad at these so called friends. To be an outcast is not right for no matter what anyone has done, we all need SINCERE friends. I can see why kids hate school if this is what happens. Very sad, but very well written.


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 19

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    This is a very deep poem. The title is perfect for this and I enjoyed the read. Although it seems kind of kiddish to write about something as "Lost friends at lunch" the way you did it, just.... wow. I wanted to cry for you, I wanted to be your only friend left at lunch. The imagery you used was awesome. The emotion was so raw that it left my heart burning. Thanks for this and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15

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    I love this, it echoes my sadness that I feel at the moment. So raw and expressive, really makes me FEEL


  • starving4perfection
    February 1
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    aaww :'( sad but great and very meaningful to me...it very relatable!
    "Forcing myself to fake a smile
    when all I want to do is just cry
    pretending my heart is still whole
    as the pieces have just broken"
    omg that is exactly like me!! great poem and thank you for entering my contest and good luck!


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    February 1
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    THIS IS SUPERB AND EMOTIVE IT INSPIRES ME
    THANKYOU


  • ToxicSuicide
    January 10

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    Thank you so much for entering my contest! This entry was very sad and gave off waves of lonilness. I loved it. Good luck.
    ~ToxicSuicide.


  • Thendestinystruck
    January 5
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    very nice write indeed! so much emotion is imbedded with in it!


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 2

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    Great write. So deep and full of emtion. I enjoyed it very much Good Luck in the contest.

    ♥ Kathraina


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    December 30, 2008
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    How very odd ... one of us should have already commented on this as we went through the entire list...

    Its the feeling of a skinned knee
    vulnerable-

    I really like this line, some very nice description in this poem, sorry that we both missed it, or didnt comment 0.o *remains slightly puzzled*
    Thanks for entering though, =(
    Laura

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