Pain consumes reason
leaving only ashes;
creating a void
that yearns to be filled
then I found you
You held me
coddled me
and whispered in my ear
"It'll be okay."
I needed you
or thought I did
but now i know
you needed me
You sucked me dry
then tossed me away
feeding off my emptiness
Author notes
prompt: "three word lie" from: Never Fall in Love
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Comments
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This is heartbreaking - I hope you're over her by now
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i am.... but now i've got another one to deal with... it never ends does it
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great take on the prompt
love the way you warped this, twisting it in a simple direction... but completely around.
Stellar job, Doug Itall.
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thanks
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difficult prompt unless you go with the standard "I Love You"... no, "It'll be OK"... yes, that lie meant to reassure, more true if "maybe" is added after it... good philosophical piece- how someone can use another, and most likely unintentionally, for we rarely ever know what we're doing... so it is more than just a "you tossed me" piece, for you gave a reason why... now the deeper question is, can he be forgiven?
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no, the deeper question is can SHE be forgiven (me being the he)
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