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inhaled

I tasted you
  and like a child's first taste of candy
  it was infectious

I snuggled close to your neck
  as if by inhaling your scent
  I could make you a part of me

hoping if I could trap you in my lungs
you would not find the strength
to push me away any longer

I underestimated your desire for freedom.

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  • The Fun House silver member
    January 3

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    Fantastic

    I can find no flaw here. It flows smoothly is written with style and you can easily wrap yourself into the emotives of the piece. Fantastic job.