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Unexpectedly



unexpectedly
like a thief coming at night
residing deeply



Words: K.Botka
12/28/08

Author notes

Love can come up on you totally unawares!

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  • inkstaind
    December 28, 2008
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    this is really lovely.


    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      December 28, 2008
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      Thanks!

      Sometimes it'd difficult to get the point across well with this type of poetry & keep to the intention of the Contest without breaking the form of the Haiku/Senryu. I appreciate your reading & taking the time to comment. Is that your pix? Interesting...Like the pen name!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    The only thing, constructively I would suggest is a different word for 'heart' and definitely not soul.

    Thanks for your entry.

    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      December 28, 2008
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      Oh oh...

      Thanks for the comment. I'll work on that....it might be a bit tough....I'm sure it's possible though....thinking....hummm...I'll have to get back to you on my edit. I was wondering if this was going to pass your parameters!