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Mortal Sin.

I want you to know what you did to me.
I want you to come home and see me in all my pain.
Come on now dad, don't look away.
Look me in they eyes or else all this has been in vain.

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Don't you want to know what I made for you?
I drew you a picture using nothing but this knife.
Tell me that you love me and that you've always cared.
I won't make the finishing cut; you can save my life.

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I want you to know how my heart aches because of your actions.
To tell you that I hate you, covers my feelings by a fraction.

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I want nothing more than for you to look my way.
I want to see the look on your face as my life fades away.

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Hey now dad, what's with the eternal frown?
You’ve never before had problems with kicking me when I was down.

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I want you to know that the blame is entirely yours

Think about that, as my blood spills all over your floors.

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I want you to know that you don't deserve to sleep well tonight.
Not while I lay awake crying until the darkness is shattered by light.


I'm sitting here, contemplating my own death.
Can you finally understand why I want to take my last breath?

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I want you to know, that although it's my hand the knife is in,
you're the one who killed me. This is your mortal sin.

Author notes

For my best friends dad. I'm writing this in her perspective, she plans to give it to him, and she helped me a little. oh. she's not suicidal though, just adds to the emotion dont you think?

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  • a.changed-soul.
    December 28, 2008

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    This was great,

    I'm very sorry for your friend..
    I'm glad she isn't suicidal..it does add to the emotion, it gives it more feeling.

    I loved the ending! This was just superb!

    "I want you to know, that although it's my hand the knife is in,
    you're the one who killed me. This is your mortal sin."


    Thank-You very much for entering,

    best of luck.