Enchantress of the Night
Awakening at night,
Opening her eyes to the Moon
As he shines above her;
The night’s only source of light.
On ebony black dragon wings
She hovers over the earth,
Igniting fear and despair
In the hearts of those who see her,
And those who hear her magnificent dragon;
An omen of death!
Her beauty is indescribable,
Pale with thin blue lips,
Purple eyes and sleek hair,
Fondled by the breeze.
Her dress, black silk,
Reaching to the ground;
Wherever she walks,
Poisonous thorns grow,
Out of the earth, the trees…
She wears a white gold tiara,
Embedded with countless diamonds,
Sapphires, amethysts and emeralds.
Her companions, black unicorns,
Roaming the woods, paving her way
of creatures and pretty colourful flowers.
She roams, hovers,
Darkness and despair are her games,
“In her world of dreams and make believe”
She is the Enchantress of the Night,
The Deadly Immortal Queen of the Night!
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
Inspired by the lyrics of Within Temptation's "World of Make Believe"
No specific part but the whole lyric and I mean to Capitalize the word 'Moon' and use 'he'
Enjoy!
In a list
A contest entry
- Darkwrite challenge (round 1) by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
550 points, ended January 10, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this! The imagery is amazing and the writing beautiful...what a wonderful piece! Thanks for sharing
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A very excellent and dark piece. Great use of imagery and word choice.
"Her beauty is indescribable,
Pale with thin blue lips,
Purple eyes and sleek hair,
Fondled by the breeze."
Great job =)
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NICE! Awesome imagery! I enjoyed this very much!!
<3 -Jess
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"Pale with thin blue lips,
Purple eyes and sleek hair" - you have conjured an intriguing character. congratulations on the gold trophy. -
Imagery is awesome. Wonderful read. I love fantasy, but read more of your works soon. Thanks for sharing.
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She's so dark, I want to meet her! Yes wickedness and glory for the paleness of perfection. Actually this was a really good poem and I feel strongly that you are a great poet!
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Great descriptives...
Fantasy, they say, is the hardest genre to write
but you made it look easy.
Greats on the gold.
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amazing
i loved this!!
it really makes a great picture in my mind.
ABSOLUTELY LOVE the imagadry. -
Wowzers!
Excellent piece You have penned for this Challenge and Powerful storyline
You brought in much imagery~
Bravo!!
Love the words: fondled by the breeze
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Awesome job! I really felt the emotion behind this piece! An A+ job! Keep up the awesome work adn thanks so much for the share! I really am looking forward to reading more of your work....which I probably have already............ I read a lot of stuff on here and try to comment on everyones....Sorry for my mindless ramblings.............HAHA!!!!!
Again.....Thanks so much for the brilliant write and share! Good luck with future writes....but judging from this, you don't really need much luck!!!!!
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i found it amazing. supernatural always entices me. your desciption of her is charming. i like it hun.
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I like it. Definately enjoyed reading your poem. Nice descriptions.
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this is great
this is awesome really good you can picture it really well amazing description and word choice keep writing and awesome job
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You got a wonderful imagery and inspiring words. Loved the images you've placed in my mind and how descriptive you've been a really well written piece.
Best of luck in the contest.
Much love
~Noor
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A very well penned piece. The imagery is darkly beautiful, superbly done. The exclamation marks do bother me a little tho, personally I think it would read just as well (if not better) without them. But that is just MO A strong entry, thanks for entering and good luck
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Amazing imagery here. I am impressed with this entry and thus far this is my favorite one. Well done here.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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