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She appeared like sunrise


from around the corner
of the softwood door
and smiled like the
first song of morning


she was in bloom;
her dew droplet easing
downwards,
radiant as her cheeks


late spring approaching;
soprano of yellows, pinks
and new life.

Author notes

Option 1: image 10.

And unintentionally Option 2: word 1 (I realised the word "sunrise" was a prompt after writing this...so I thought I better mention it here.)




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  • Topnotchsy
    March 8

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    Beautiful. I love the feeling of rebirth and creation in this piece, and the metaphor of sunrise is perfect.


  • Nangaleema
    February 25

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    what a gorgeous metaphor.

    "She appeared like sunrise

    from around the corner
    of the softwood door
    and smiled like the
    first song of morning" - this poem is a breath of fresh air, a bit of sunshine. and a beautiful comment on womanhood. i loved it. - Mary Jo




  • Ez Writer silver member
    January 28
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    A very elegant and lovely write !
    A pleasure to read indeed !
    Best wishes ! Friend Easy

  • tara wilson gold member
    January 15

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    i love this because it reminds so much of a simultaneous metaphor for a radiant pregnant woman & the entrance of a baby girl into the world -- a very beautiful poem!

  • Zenoes
    January 1

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    Very elegant

    Nicely done, very soft and open. Wonderful images. My suggestion for this poem...don't change a thing.


  • Meroza
    January 1

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    This is so simple, clean, and beautiful. I adore your take on the prompt, the idea, the clean, simple feel to it all.
    Well done!

    Best of luck

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 29, 2008

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    This brought to mind a pregnant woman, though that may have been the intent as well. I can't really offer and suggestions on this write because to me, it reads perfectly and drew comparisons that have cemented images in mind.

    A wonderful read.

    s and best wishes always... ~Genie~


    • silverscent gold member
      January 2

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      I'm glad it brought to mind a pregant woman, that was the intention. Thanks for the comment.


  • Sagittarius silver member
    December 29, 2008

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    Lovely poem about the coming of spring, told in words that flow and promise.

    Nice work.

    Sag


  • usefuldistraction
    December 29, 2008
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    The lightness of this piece is just superb, delicate, eagerly boyant...beautifully written.

  • Bruce silver member
    December 28, 2008

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    I thought this was super. Very strong writing. If I had to suggest anything it would be to only reveal her identity in the last stanza.


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    December 28, 2008

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    THERE IS A VERY REFRESHING QUALITY TO THIS POEM,MOVING TOWARDS THE NEW YEAR.THE IMAGRY IS INCREDIBLY GOOD
    THANKS FOR SHARING
    LITTLEFISHONE

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