Winter came with echoed winds
hearts crumbled as mortal eyes closed
for mortality no longer lived.
Winds speak captured in softness where
spirits live, leaving restless souls within
loved ones kiss.
And as daylight fades and New Year approaches
hardness begins to soften as new ray's of
hope sprinkle earth.
A contest entry
- Exhale.......& Embrace a New Year... by poet2angels.
700 points, ended January 1, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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nice job!
I love the ending, it has so much hope~
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This is truly beautiful. I love 'as new ray's of hope sprinkle the earth'. Gorgeous imagery.
Wonderful wording throughout that just dances across the page.
Congratulations on your trophy.
Gaylene
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A beautiful verse of looking ahead for new beginnings as the New Year approaches~
I especially love your second stanza..."leaving restless souls within loved ones kisses"
How true those words are. We keep the things that help us to remember and in some ways, that helps us to let go and embrace life again...
Just my thoughts on where your beautiful verse took me.
Hope you have a wonderful New Year of New Beginnings!
Loved this so much as always!
Blessings my friend~
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This is a kiss of hope for the new year ahead...Such softness blooms from a first sad bud....Now I see a radiant flower glowing with droplets of hope...The title caught my eye since that is what I named the pic when I saved it ....Your poem perfectly fits it...
Ty for entering this lovely piece and HAppy new year!
Lynda
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A lovely write and presentation. Heartfelt. Good use of personification. Good imagery,flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good closing verse. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.
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