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Winter Seas

Deserted shores.. pale, bleak.

 

Far flung horizons obscured

in rolling mists

as majestic waves

thunder in tumultuous grandeur

heaving deep cold colours

capped with frothing sprays that

pound in relentless gallant passion

 

Bitter winds

suspending seafaring gulls

in silenced cries of static flight

to bide the currents of time

 

Tantalising, rapturous blasts of air

chill to the core

as energy surges unharnessed

in answer to the plea

of untamed ecstasy

 

 

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  • chilali
    January 11

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    Beautiful imagery throughout. Excellent word choice as well. Good luck in the contest.

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    January 5

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    "energy surges unharnessed"
    One does not usually see a winter storm as energy but as cold and destructive; yet here you have displayed its passion centered around the quiet flight of gulls.
    well done
    ken


  • Beret55 silver member
    January 5
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    Vrey well done..Choice and placement of words very good.


  • penman gold member
    January 4
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. So very creative and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Rhythm Child
    December 31, 2008

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    thankyou for entering. I hope you enjoy the contest and have fun.

    take care
    message me for anything

    Rhythm Child


  • KayJay
    December 30, 2008

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    You've captured the essence of winter in wonderful imagery and flowing prose... This is as close to perfect as I've seen... Had to put my coat on reading this Really, an amazing write...
    Ken


  • Sandygram silver member
    December 29, 2008

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    Wonderful Imagery

    Good Morning, A wonderful poem you have penned. You have captured the bone chilling cold and depth of winter by the sea. Stuning imagery. Certainly deserves a Gold!!!! Take care, Sandy


  • Ademon
    December 29, 2008

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    Omg...you've out done yourself...this is by far the best poem that you've written in my book, it absolutely gave me the chills and the last line was perfect...it drove it home and was like wow, the imagery was building up to the very end. I could see everything you were describing to me!!! I love this:
    Tantalising, rapturous blasts of air

    chill to the core

    as energy surges unharnessed

    in answer to the plea

    of untamed ecstasy

    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!! GOOD LUCK ON THIS you deserve a brightly colored shiney!


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 28, 2008

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    I gotta say...
    this is one of the best poems i've read from you so far, well done on this piece of art

    All the best to you

    Ken


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 28, 2008

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    A magnificent look at winter's presence on the open seas. The imagery here is stunning. Best of luck to you in the contest. This is quite good.


  • Sunshine Always
    December 28, 2008

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    Lovely!!! This my friend is excellent and as I am off to cornwall next weekend, a most apt write. bless you..mal

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